Massive Chapter Rewrite (Again) · 4:10am Mar 26th, 2022
G'day all! After much discussion with a few fellow authors, I have decided to rewrite the first chapter of 'Thera Victoria!'. Don't be alarmed, the chapter will be roughly the same premise of setup, but there will be an overhaul of writing style for a more descriptive reading to make it easier to follow up, improved dialogue, links to certain Xeno races to better describe them, and a redo on the cliffhanger ending to better present what is in store for the Equestians.
The other chapter(s) will not change due to being inconsequential to the changes but might be better appreciated with the changes from the rewrite. I promise, with these changes it will finally answer the road block to a conundrum I had with the series as a whole and should greatly motivate me for more frequent updates for this series. I hope you're looking forward to it as much as I am.
Wish me luck on the overhaul!
Mate is this series, like many paradox games, going t die in development hell? No ill will meant, mind, I merely worry. You seem unable to commit to putting pen to paper, perhaps an increase in self confidence?
Your style does have an insatiable hook to it, and the sense of confidence and the lack of care for explanation when it comes to the characters reminds me of the culture series. The characters live here, why explain anything? It makes the exposition we do get far more enticing and interesting - like tourists staring at a cathedral information plaque.
What I'm saying is, you do have it, here with this story. My only advisory would be to A- plan ahead a bit more, and B- commit. Don't over edit, just write. You can edit and consult before posting, but writing a couple chapters ahead of the site would make this a-lot easier for you.
Feel free to ignore this, just a concern I'm raising because I do quite delight in this little world you have, with what little I know of it.
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Nope, just had a moment of clarity when I reviewed what I've written so far. If I want this series to progress where I want it to go, I need to take a step back to fix old chapters to make sense.
Plus, I left too many grammatical errors that kills me in the inside if I leave it unfixed.
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Ah, fair enough.