Any last-minute changes I could make to Silent Wings? · 12:57pm Jul 1st, 2020
Yesterday, I hurried to finish Silent Wings because I thought the deadline for the Depth in Innocence contest would be as soon as the 1st of July began in Mountain Time. Turns out that there are 23 hours left. I want this fanfic to be as good as possible, so if there are any minor improvements you want me to make, please let me know.
I suppose you could have spent a little time with Silverstream before she showed up yelling "TERRAMAR". Maybe giving a little more insight into her thought process while deciding to apologize. Sorry, that's the best I can come up with.
5298564 Good point. I’ll make her apology longer.
I couldn’t elaborate upon her thought process that much, though, because that part of the chapter is from Terramar’s perspective.
Maybe a short and sweet epilogue or something of the sort. The story is fine as is but if you want to add stuff then by all means do it, you are the writer.
The only minor adjustment I'd suggest is Silverstream seemed to lose her temper far too quickly during chapter four's lunch. Since the whole sequence is from Gallus's perspective, maybe have him zoning out and then suddenly snapping back to attention when he notices Silverstream throwing a cup at Terramar or something.
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Unfortunately, it's past the contest's deadline now, but I can still make changes even if GMBlackjack won't see them.
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Eh, don’t don’t sweat it then. What’s done is done for the contest’s purposes. I if course go back to my own olde works and tweak them often, but every author is different. Cyriak, one of the most talented animators on YouTube, is famous for his declaration “I never watch nor even think about a video after uploading it. The past is the past.”