Story updates/changes! · 4:57pm Jun 16th, 2020
Alrighty then, after a severe reforging of my story, I'm going to lay out the specific changes on the broad scale, so those who are wanting to know what changed where shall know.
The first thing I did was take the advice to heart from 'Insert commenter's name here' and chop down my chapter lengths severely (while also keeping the narrative flow). I've done that to what I feel works, taking chapters with twenty thousand some-odd words down to at the most nine or ten thousand.
Bearing that in mind the new spread of chapters one through fifteen, save for two, are modified yet preexisting chapters. So honestly I've only inserted a little extra to connect the dots with the new pathing and stuff.
Chapters '5 Desert Wind' and '11 I'll Fall' are the new linking chapters I've put into the story, to compensate for my 'headcanon' map I've developed for the story. The biggest reason for the change honestly was the fact The Wasteland I'd created felt ridiculously small as I reread my work, and I hope the new scaling works out. :)
The one, most important change in my opinion, was modifying character history/names. The biggy in the mash was actually Ruby Honeycup's name as that felt far more like a placeholder to me than anything. It never felt 'right' to me, but now she is named 'Sparks'. That was perhaps the only change she suffered, while Red Eagle suffered substantially at the hooves of redesign. 'Ch. 5 Desert Wind', '4 By Any Means', '6 The Hunters', '7 You and Me'. '11 I'll Fall', and lastly '12 Pet' touches on this correction. No spoilers as to what, of course, but know that, if you have read all the stuff I've done so far (which I must profusely thank you and, sadly, apologize for such a retrofit).
The major changes present were mostly attributed to a side project of Storms of The Divide, mostly a prequel to tell Red Eagle's origin story, and the hashing out of what exactly happened to him needed me to redetirmine his histories.
Overlong story overshort, the 'me writing a prequel before the main story was even remotely finished' was a boon that helped me concrete Red Eagle's own story; the 'who, what, when, where, why' of his character.
The OTHER other major change in the story was honestly the 'map' of Equestria, which I've developed one as I had written here earlier, and while I know it's almost a doomed cause I hope the one I made actually works. I'll be posting it up once I polish it up more, but the core of it is solid [I think... Mapping and such are doomed for Fallout: Equestria, much to my chagrin for reasons too expansive to list here (I blame LOTR for my cartography obsession)].
Another huge modification has been (forgive me if my terminology fails me here) 'grammatical correctness', as in paragraph and dialogue structure. It isn't a inherent narrative change, but it is hopefully an improvement. I'm unsure if the changes were necessary, or even 'correct', but the flow, I feel, should be better.
:An example of that would be this:
"Yeah, lol!" the pony said. The other one chuckled.
"Verily, lol!"
to
[i/]"Yeah, lol!" The pony said.
The other one chuckled. "Verily, lol!"
Capitalization after complete statements was an issue I beleive I've murdered, but otherwise I feel like this flow is better for who is saying what and who responds with what, and less confusion between them. I also rewrote the blocks to make sense a little more, and here's hoping the change provides a better product.
The only other changes I've done were perhaps some 'minor' (if I can even call it that) alterations to the story's progression that involves Red Eagle and The Wasteland as a whole (no spoilers ;)). Getting the information right in terms of the collective timeline for the original fiction by Kkat, or writing in reasons for the incorrectness to make sense, was important to me, and I hope I've done the source material justice.
Otherwise, that's pretty much it. I hope you enjoy the alterations, and I also hope it actually works now! :)
~Canagan
Cool. Looking forward to giving it a read.
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Thank you for being interested! I only hope it lives up to expectations!