Apr
21st
2020
Overlord Question! Edit! · 5:18am Apr 21st, 2020
For the next chapter of An Overlord Apart, I am debating on writing out Twilights' interaction with the Princesses about Hunter rescinding his claim. Is that something that you would want to read about or should I move past it and just let it happen in the background? I'm leaning toward writing it but I am on the fence about adding it to a chapter and using it. Let me know your opinion!!
Edit: Okay votes are in and I will be writing it out and hopefully it ends up explaining a few things and giving Celly and Lulu a bit of a reality check while we are at it! Thank you guys for your input and as always I will do my best to make it worthy of you guys reading! Thank you!
I wouldn’t mind reading the interaction, it already sounds very interesting on its own and worth including (Hunter, a pony who the princesses had trouble negotiating the land/rule dispute with solved amazingly well by Twilight who has bonded really well with)
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I definatly agree, not every chapter needs to be a death defying compilation of heroic deeds. Zapoi comrade.
Whichever you choose will be alright in my book, but I would like to read Celly and Lulu’s reaction to the new regalia
*Insert gif of Patrick Star going "uhhh" here because my phone won't let me*
It would be completely up to you in the end but I fkr one believe it would be an interesting chapter .
I personally would like to see her discussing things with the Princesses. So far you've brought a lot of depth into the characters, especially Hunter. Twilight can't of course share everything but the main points? Hell yes.
I want to see how the Princesses react, and get that little fact rubbed in that A) Celestia did try and use her and "friendship" to get her way, and I want to see if Twilight gives her a little proverbial smack in the face for the fact that she tried to manipulate things, and that Twilight and Hunter came to the decision on a mutual understanding and agreement. And B) That not acting like a total asshat, looking at Luna mind you, gets you further then behaving as one.
Hey, I have my reasons, but I consider them valid. I am taking Hunter's point of view as it is the Princesses may be powerful beings but it doesn't give them solemn sovereignty of everything that is Pony kind, and Hunter has shown that if you keep your integrity intact and a level head, anyone can become a good ruler. And yes I want them kind of kicked off their high horse, but that's just me!
id like to see there reaction and her explain how she did it
To be perfectly honest, while l do love your story and think it is one of the best i have ever read, and the talks would be interesting to read .... l am just against him rescinding his claim... because by all rights and all legal laws, the lands are his, it is the princesses who are trying to claim the land as theirs without any legal rights
I'll read it, sounds like a very important character moment.
I'm leaning toward writing it out. The ENTIRE reason for Twilight and the others going to the Netherworld Empire and interacting with Hunter has been because of this land dispute. Hunter has agreed to a partial rescinding of his fully legal claim. Equestria gets the land with the cities he gets the rest.
The nitty gritty details of the new borders need not be described. You have done a wonderful, if somewhat minorly annoying, job of never spelling out the exact nature of the border change and left it up to the reader.
SInce "The borders were recently changed due to the actions of Tirek and others." according to the very first chapter, my personal assumption was that the border was denoted by a river. Equestria on one side and the Netherworld Empire on the other. Twilight's fight with Tirek shifted the course of the river resulting in several Equestrian towns being legally in Netherworld territory.
Without a camera in Equestria your words will have to do for seeing the image of Celestia absolutely dumbstruck that Twilight succeed against all odds again.
Yes, I think most of us agree that the scene being written should be a thing. Feels like an important bit, and I was expecting when this happens for a while already)
yup, that'll definitely be an interesting interaction. I can see the Princesses congratulate Twilight in convincing him to concede and Twilight getting angry at them for insinuating that she manipulated him.....I dunno, that's my thought.
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I love Luna as a character, but her old style can get very grating to someone like Hunter, who rules without a need for pompous words.
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Indeed. Its why it kind of needs a proverbial smack in the face until it sinks in for Luna that she won't get everything she wants. At least in my perspective she presumes that she will get what she wants if she behaves how she used too in a lot of things.
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That's very true. I will be writing it out and I hope to have it ready either next Sunday or the one after!
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Normally I would have had him hold onto it. But I used it to show the bond between them. Hopefully it worked, unless I missed the mark again.
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I left it deliberately vague, sorry. I was focused on the ponies and the situation and I may have let that stay in the background. Sorry about that!
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Well you could do BOTH.... for example he is willing to give up the land because of his relationship with Twilight, she goes to tell Sun and Moonbutt, and overhears them planning to lay claim to even more of his lands, which they are arrogant enough to to do, we see that more then enough time the show, that they think they have the right to say and do whatever they want in other kingdoms, causing Twilight to inform him about their lands, which in turn makes him reaffirm his lawful right and retract his offer of giving up the land
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Oooohhhh...That is a good idea...*runs off to alter a chapter...or two.* Than you for the inspiration btw!
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you are more then welcome my friend