Stuff changes · 11:38pm Aug 14th, 2019
Princess Celestia: It seems as though everypony is attempting to uphold conventional morality. But not you.
Nut: What is it that you think I do different?
Princess Celestia: Time passes. Convention changes. Ponies are so focused on upholding conventional morality that they are letting the past hold back the future. But not you. Nut, you seek to define your own sense of morality. This is not an easy path. Thankfully, you don’t have to go alone.
Nut: (Loss for words)
Princess Celestia: It will cost you dearly, but I think you already know that.
Nut: It cost me Pod. My family. I mean, we’re not estranged, but we don’t see eye to eye.
Princess Celestia: The right thing is never easy.
Nut: But am I doing the right thing?
Princess Celestia: Only time will tell.
Nut: The cost… what if I am wrong? I’ve given up so much already.
Princess Celestia: Life will demand far more of you. I wish we had more time, but others demand my time and attention. Go do something about Vanhoover, Nut. So long as the city isn’t burnt to the ground, I shall be forgiving. Good luck, and good parting.
So, with some time and typing, the raw script became this:
With her sister still rubbing against her, Princess Celestia seemed thoughtful. After a few moments, she turned to Nut and said, “It seems as though everypony is attempting to uphold conventional morality. But not you. Out of all of House Eccentrica, you alone are the true non-conformist. The odd black sheep.”
Caught off guard, Nut gave these words careful consideration as he asked, “What is it that you think I do different?”
Princess Luna pulled away from her sister to look at Nut directly, while Tater Blossom reached up to adjust her hat. He found himself quite uncomfortable with suddenly being the center of attention, as it was in his nature to strive to avoid notice. Yet, here he was, with the commanding gazes of two alicorns held fast upon him.
“Time passes. Convention changes. Ponies are so focused on upholding conventional morality that they are letting the past hold back the future. But not you. Nut, you seek to define your own sense of morality. This is not an easy path. Thankfully, you don’t have to go alone. You have an apprentice in dire need of these lessons due to the circumstances of her upbringing.”
He flogged his brain for a response, but all his efforts were for naught.
“It will cost you dearly, but I think you already know that. Traditions and social mores are the hardest things to change. Just look at what it is doing to your apprentice. See how she suffers as she has to examine all of her values to see which are worthy, and which must be cast aside. Such terrible price. For her, it left her shunned. Cast out. Unwanted.”
Nut found the words he wished to say, but he lacked the desire to say them. Still, such words were necessary, and with great regret he said, “It cost me Pod. My family. I mean, we’re not estranged, but we don’t see eye to eye. It feels like everything went wrong. All because I wanted to discover myself. The pony that I wished to be, and not the pony that everypony wanted me to be.”
In response, the taller of the two princesses nodded. “The right thing is never easy.”
“But am I doing the right thing?” Too late, he realised the folly of his own question. Even after saying that he didn’t let anypony tell him what was moral, and yet here he was, asking a proverbial goddess what she thought was moral. It left him feeling foolish.
Princess Celestia chuckled hard enough that her body shook. “Only time will tell.”
The cost… what if I am wrong?” asked Nut, who was still in a weird place that he’d rather not be, which was seeking morality advice from some ancient, immortal being. “I’ve given up so much already.”
“Life will demand far more of you. I wish we had more time, but others demand my time and attention. Go do something about Vanhoover, Nut. So long as the city isn’t burnt to the ground, I shall be forgiving. Good luck, and good parting.”
See if you can spot the differences.
That’s pretty good, but it seems a bit repetitive... elements from the first area are copied almost verbatim into the second one... perhaps you should just pick one, and not the other? Also, the grey background is distracting where it goes back and forth... I’d just pick one color and stick with it.
Seriously, though - seeing how the process works is interesting, to me at least. Thanks for the backstage peek!
I don't know man, the first one seems unfinished. Almost like a draft or something. If I were you I'd watch out, your standards might be slipping
so what if only some of Vanhoover burns to the ground
What most people don't understand... is that means Nut is a Nietzchean Ubermensch. The Ubermensch is not some superhuman, or someone who considers themselves beyond morality, they are someone who takes a look at society, and decides for themselves what is and is not actually moral, and redefines what morality is for those who follow after.
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Correct. Nut is a morality creator, not a morality consumer.
Of course, that doesn't mean that he's right. Very important thing to note.
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The first one is a draft. The second one is the fleshed out worked on version.
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No way
So... like... a Clydesdale?