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JonasHoliday44


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  • 208 weeks
    Story Review 6

    Woah, It has been 41 weeks since my last story review. That's way to close to a year.
    Spoilers!
    Today we are reviewing Sweetie by: Stolen Memes.

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  • 220 weeks
    Update

    Well. It's been a while, I'm honestly not sure when I was last online. But rest assured I am not dead! I know it has been a while but my reviewing skills are just as good as ever! And that's probably one too many exclamation points but, Whatever.
    Just a few things First off. I do realize that I should put spoiler warnings on all of my reviews. I will go back and do that.

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  • 250 weeks
    Story review 5

    Well, It has been close to 2 weeks at this point. I do apologize. I had planned to do this on Monday, but stuff got in the way. (Excuses Excuses)
    WARNING-SPOILERS AHEAD
    Again, this is my opinion.
    Today I am going with a pretty underrated story from another relatively established author.

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    1 comments · 248 views
  • 252 weeks
    Story Review 4

    Woah I'm on a roll with these, I guess I'm trying to make up for my 2-week absence.
    As always This is my opinion.
    WARNING-SPOILERS AHEAD
    Today we are going to a pretty established author, I would love to review some of his other stories, but as of current, I am trying to perfect my ability to write reviews of chaptered stories.

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    4 comments · 251 views
  • 252 weeks
    Story Review 3

    Another one.
    Disclaimer: This is my opinion
    Today I'm coming back with a pretty short story, It has slightly over 1k words.
    Today's story is The voice in Sweetie Belle's head By Puppycornashlynn
    WARNING-SPOILERS AHEAD

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    2 comments · 251 views
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20th
2019

Story review 5 · 4:40am Jul 20th, 2019

Well, It has been close to 2 weeks at this point. I do apologize. I had planned to do this on Monday, but stuff got in the way. (Excuses Excuses)
WARNING-SPOILERS AHEAD
Again, this is my opinion.
Today I am going with a pretty underrated story from another relatively established author.

Todays story is The Searchers by Fluttercheer

This story is a very long one-shot with over 10k words so buckle up this might be a little long.

The story starts with Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo arriving in Appleloosa, Apple Bloom is not with them because she got sick. The Crusaders have decided to try to get rodeo cutie marks. Sweetie Belle Is also weirdly ok with there being an outlaw named Troubleshoes on the loose, Scootaloo is a bit apprehensive which is a little out of character but whatever. The crusaders end up at a gift shop nothing really important happens here Sweetie Kisses Scootaloo for whatever reason and then they get scolded by AppleJack for running off by themselves they apologize and they went about their day. Sweetie promptly comes up with the great idea to go look for Toubleshoes, Scootaloo again is apprehensive. I feel like the personalities are a little switched up in this story, but that doesn't bother me. They jump out the window and set out to find Troubleshoes, They agree to look for half an hour, they... no Sweetie Hatches a plan to catch The Outlaw, She would stay back and distract Troubleshoes while Scootaloo goes and gets the sheriff. But Scootaloo says no because she doesn't want to go through the dark forest alone because she is afraid of Dark Forests, Which is a fair thing to be afraid of. They get into an argument which ends with Sweetie calling Scootaloo a chicken, this doesn't go over well, So Sweetie bounces leaving Scootaloo alone outside the forest, Scootaloo decides to bounce too as she enters the forest. She then has an exorcism right there on the ground. She then hears a scream which she immediately identifies as Sweetie Belle, Scootaloo thinks about not helping her but thinks better of it. She finds Sweetie With a stick in her leg, She walks over and pulls the stick out of her leg (Which seems like a bad idea) Scootaloo tells Sweetie to get on her back, they wander around until they find an old house, they enter and Scootaloo lays Sweetie down on the bed. Scootaloo finds a rag and some cider to help clean the wound, Scootaloo goes to return the supplies, She turns around and sees Sweetie, They hug and makeup Because of Course, they do Sweetie Gets back on Scootaloo's back and they bounce. But as they start to exit the forest Sweetie Starts to feel dizzy, She falls off Scootaloo's back, She tells Scoots to go get a doctor, Scootaloo agrees. But as she turns around and Troubleshoes

Overall this story is good, other than a few typical Spelling and grammatical mistakes.
Final rating: 8.5 out of 10
Woah my highest rating yet! Overall I recommend this story to anyone.

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Comments ( 1 )

I finally have been reading your review of "The Searchers". It's, despite your high rating at the end, not a flattering one, but thank you for at least attempting to write a fair review of one of my stories. I advice you to take more time with stories you review, though, to avoid missing important facts. Actually finishing a review and not stopping in the middle of a sentence also helps.

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