Story review 1

Hello all and welcome to my first story review.
Before we start I just want to be clear here. This is just my opinion, so take it with a grain of salt
WARNING-SPOILERS AHEAD
So this is my review on: SOS By Sc14

So for my first review, I decided to go with a small story from a small account.

So SOS is an interesting kind of an odd story. The description, in my opinion, doesn't exactly make me want to read the story. mainly attributed to the fact that it is only 2 sentences long, Now don't get me wrong, there is nothing inherently wrong with a 2 sentence description it's just how it is executed. Now some people might like this simplistic description, but personally think it's kind of un-captivating.

Now on to the story at hand. It starts with the statement "There is a stranger following me" This is an unusual first line because It is the first sentence of the Description. Now there is nothing wrong with this I just think it is unusual. But it continues with the explanation of how the main character has come to this conclusion, explaining how he has tried to shake this stalker by going through various locations such as restaurants, stores, and Back Alleys? If someone is following me, I don't know about you, but the last place I would go to was a back alley. he continues by saying that he doesn't want to lead the stalker to his house, but he also doesn't want to lead him to the police station because then he might get aggressive or "Suspicious" As he puts it.

The second paragraph is mainly just the narrator or the main character whatever you want to call him going over what might happen if he is caught by this stalker. He also goes over his plan of getting coffee in an attempt to bore the stalker. It's overall not a bad chapter. The 3rd paragraph is relatively the same as the 2nd paragraph, I kinda feel like he could've combined the two chapters but that's just me. It just follows the main character asking questions like "What Have I done to deserve this?" and then he starts to wonder if this is all a big coincidence, which I only bring up because one of the questions he asks about this situation possibly being a coincidence is "Could he just have the same route as me?" This is odd because I thought he just walked trough all those shops and stuff to try to lose the stalker but now it's his route.

Now the fourth paragraph is where I think this story starts to go downhill a little, which I attribute to the excessive repetition in this paragraph. it is just a bunch of questions that are relatively inconsequential to the story. Also, he refers to the "He is just standing there menacingly" meme. But overall the only really important part of this chapter is him deciding to go get Rarity's help, rarity also apparently has a crush on the main character which is never addressed again. the next important part of the story comes in the 7th paragraph where our protagonist reaches the Carousel Boutique which he for some reason he calls it the portico. but unfortunately, Rarity is not home, because of course, she isn't.

So now our hero has to make a run to the police station. the next few paragraphs are just the same, so I'm just going to combine them all. So he comes up with the plan to just normally walk to the police station and only run or jog if the stalker does. At first, the main character believes that the stalker doesn't realize where he is leading him but unfortunately the stalker does end up realizing. And They both speed up until they are both running. then it just ends.

Final assessment.
Score 5/10
Overall this story is pretty much the definition of mediocre. it has good parts and it has bad parts, but I just feel like there are the same amount of Bad parts as good parts.

Make sure to go check this story for yourself.
Thank you for reading!