Reflections - v.1.2

Hey all!

So I've spent the last few days making some fixes to Reflections. I've compiled a lot of the feedback that I've received on the story thus far, both those through fimfiction and those via off-site sources, most of which was valuable (and some of which was, obviously, not so valuable). These improvements and fixes which I have spent the last few days implementing represent the most substantial set of revisions to date. There have been minor stealth fixes here and there but this was of such scale that I figured that I would make a blog post about it to let you all know.

Don't worry, it's still the same story in most aspects. It just reads a little better now.

Because I've got the mindset of a programmer, I felt the need to include a changelog. You can find it after the break~

Narrative improvements:
-Explained how snow can exist in the Crystal Empire.
-"That other threat" is now actually mentioned as being some cultists. Consider thyselves sated!
-Twilight now follows Crystal's advice and attacks Miasmus! But she's a terrible shot. Just ask Starlight!
-Explained why Crystal arrived so late in the game (as in, she admits that she dropped the ball big time).
-Crystal no longer breaks Celestia's back (well, she never did, but the string of events makes it seem that way).
-Crystal dropping Twilight off in new timeline is now not so sudden. Have some feels!
-Shortened and simplified Twilight's multiversal reasonings since most people pretty much understand that stuff already.

Mechanical improvements:
-Fixed some talking heads.
-Fixed typos and grammar errors.
-Removed some repeated words and phrases.
-Improved showing versus telling

Presentational improvement:
-Updated story description to better reflect the actual story.

Familiar: 2326 -> 2320
Audience: 3077 -> 3006
Preparations: 3094 -> 3045
Blaze: 4018 -> 3909
Defeat: 3658 -> 3528
Collapse: 4085 -> 4156
Ghosts: 3775 -> 3645
Algorithm: 3218 -> 2622
Mechanics: 6786 - 6768

Comments

[darkszero]

<3 change logs!