On my latest story... · 9:21pm Mar 12th, 2017
Okay, I've said in the past that I really despise stories which are basically blog posts disguised as stories, and then I go ahead and write one myself. Ugh, I'm such a hypocrite. But honestly, I needed to vent. But I should have done it here, not in a story. Deadpan Snarker, DiscordedSheepcity, I admit when you're right.
Okay, this has a lot of problems. Not in the grammar area or any of that, it's fine from what I can see. I'm not an editor.
Starlight is just the author's mouthpiece here, and I don't care what the subject matter is in any story, this is never an okay thing to do. It always comes across as the author just using a character to spout their opinions and do nothing else. Here, it's not even subtle, especially with the ending beating you over the head with it.
In this case, it makes even less sense though because Starlight lists off basically every reason why a lot of people hate her without giving any reason as to why people should like her, but saying people should anyway. It's almost as if she's talking down to the reader very condescendingly. "Yeah I did all this bad shit, but love me anyway! Why? Uhhh..." that's basically all that happened here. Also she conveniently left out everything that happened in "Every Little Thing she Does" because of how inexcusably bad she was there (though I can give this story the benefit of the doubt and assume Starlight's ranting before that happens.)
Bottom line is this story comes across as very condescending. I don't think people that don't like her character would appreciate being talked down to like this. Especially by worst pony. It's actually very insulting.
After reading the new things added at the end, would it surprise you to say that it's a slight improvement but really not that much? It really doesn't change the fact that this entire rant's purpose is to just throw shade at people that don't like a character who's feelings cannot be hurt because she isn't even real. And said shade is coming from the mouth of the character. Having the character that people hate insult them for it isn't going to change anyone's mind.
If you'll notice the main problem I have with this whole thing is it's just directly insulting a group of people that have an opinion different from yours.
Yeah, you probably wanted to reach a wider audience, I can understand that. It just seems a bit misleading to utilise a fictional character as your own personal mouthpiece, and then put it in the guise of a story. But if the mods see this and let it stay, who am I to object?
My views on the matter are that Starlight was a great villain in the S5 opening, had a lousy rushed redemption in S5 climax (though the rest of the episodes were great) but she really blossomed in S6 so much she's now one of my favourite characters
so much so that I even wrote a well recieved fic about her, that I look forward to continuing soon (Of course, I had to squeeze Diamond Tiara in there too)
And even though I love the music video, it always makes me cry... so unless I'm peeling onions as an excuse, I tend to try and avoid watching it, unless I'm SURE I'm all alone to blub in peace...
So if anyone has any advice on how to rewrite this story into less of a blog post, or something that doesn't beat you over the head with the message, it'd be greatly appreciated.
please put the story back. I really do love reading it and helps me support Glim Glam
4453271 Problem is, it comes off as insulting, and it makes me look like a hypocrite.
4453272 I see...
but it still taught me about Starlight Glimmer. I just hope it's rewritten as a story again. because... it made me cry when I read it 
4453275 Hmm, I can think of rewriting it as a story with Starlight lamenting about her lot in life, with Twilight or somepony else (Probably Luna) then coming to tell her she's not all bad. Less of a punch to the gut towards the Starlight haters that way.
4453277 okay. let me know when it is published, okay?
btw, of my four comments I had on that story, what did you think of my fourth and final comment?
4453284 Liked it actually, and if I do rewrite the story, as I do have a lot on my plate writing wise right now, I'll be sure to let you know. On another note, if you like Star Wars, I've got a open to anyone collab story going on right now and as far as I can tell, nobody's written a single thing for it except me. (What, I can promote one of my own stories in my own blog posts?)
4453295 I knew you would. it was perhaps the honest comment I have ever done on this website