Some thoughts on House Sparkle, dood. · 8:57pm Sep 18th, 2016
So every once in a while I reread House Sparkle to keep myself in the know of how I messed up and how I fix it, dood.
Despite the fact that I still have two chapters to write of Misadventures before I jump on that ship again, I still like to know what I missed and if I need to correct some mistakes, dood.
So I began worrying that I made Twilight too overpowered in a sense, the way I described her as a rather fit woman-horse with a decent sized bust like in between B and C cup, big-ish dick, good ass, and second most magical entity in Equestria, dood. I may be a prinny that loves him some OP Twilight action, but for a story that isn't going to be batshit insane, I have to draw the line.
So this blog post to to squash those thoughts and help me remember the score of what I'm doing, dood.
Twilight Sparkle is supposed to be among the greatest magical minds in Equestria(the country not the world) due to her raw power. Celestia and maybe a kitsuna or two will have more magic than her when it happens and I'm willing to concede that Sunset Shimmer and Trixie are both close second/third to Twilight's magic. After all, Sunset studied with Twilight and Trixie is Celestia's student in this story so it would make sense that the two wouldn't be too under-powered when compared to Twilight, dood. Compared to the show: Twilight is Alicornish-Twilight, Trixie is Sunset, Sunset is Trixie with the alicorn amulet in terms of magic power... and Rarity is Rarity.
Because of her magic, Twilight was always planned to have a significant lack of physical skill/training. So out of the six girls, Twilight would get tired faster, can't throw or take a punch, and only has that second wind during sex because the spirit is willing and is forcing the body to do its job, dood.
The reason why Twilight is kind of a dick is more so to prevent her form being the happy-go lucky character that befriends everyone and eventually turn her into a Mary-Sue. As it stands, both Rarity and Rainbow Dash tolerate her a good deal for their next pay check (and sex in Dash's case), Fluttershy is in love because she is a closet loner that lives by her anime, Applejack is merely a friend, and Pinkie is just okay with everything so long as it doesn't tarnish her beliefs... like Barb's attraction to Twilight, dood.
Barb, I have to admit, I could have done a better job but she turned out better than what could have happened and only got worse when I back pedaled after she attempted to rape Twilight. In other words, the deal Twilight made with Barb is the biggest problem in the story that I can not fix because then I'd have to rewrite a major chunk of it, dood. More Barb on Twilight action down the path for sure but I'll have to do a better job than forcing them like that.
Anyways, dood. As for anime fights, it might happen but don't count on it, dood. I have a hard time writing action scenes, you've all read my clop and how sometimes I forget to add some descriptions of actions. If anything, I'll try to use something else to distract from the fight unless I HAVE to acknowledge a fight. But at any rate. Bonez (OC dogman do not steal) is the strongest physically of the cast with Twilight being the weakest adult character. Dash is the fastest with Bonez being the slowest. Twilight is the most magical with... I guess Mayor Mare being the least magical.
What about other characters, dood?
Rarity will be drifting in and out of the story due to her spot in Tall Tale Mountains as the Baroness with Octavia Melody taking her place as Twilight's butler/maid with Vinyl coming in and out in the same way. Despite this, I will have segments or chapters dedicated to Rarity and how she's doing her thing in her new home. But again, we know she lied to become Twilight/Shining's butler so that she can impress them with her fashion designs, making Tall Tale more fabulous as a result. I don't really interact with humans often so I hope that I did an okay job with how Rarity treated Sweetie Belle, firmly but still very caring considering I dunno what happened to their parents yet (death? Moved across the sea? not my problem yet, dood)
I want Rarity to be more reserved and more regal than her show counterpart, like how Twilight is more dismissive than her first episode appearance. Where she is still generous and kind but still isn't above using her looks and seducing others to get what she wants (but not letting said seduction get too far) but the core difference would probably be Rarity's desire to find that 'Prince Charming' and being a hopeless romantic, which is now Fluttershy's role. Yeah, I think I convened it as Rarity still likes the high society life but she is a bit more wary of what it entails than her show counterpart, dood. As for body type, I hope I made it easy for you guys to picture her as the most beautiful of the girls in terms of body types. Heart-shaped rump, generous tits, a face that could make a dood bow and ask for commands, and a body that shows that she tries to maintain her figure.
Rainbow Dash... I want her to be rough tomboy, thin but muscular body set, a lack of rack with a butt that won't quit. A bit cliched to play with the notion that she's gay but it works, dood. Fortunatly, she'll be loyal to a fault just like the TV show Dash but she'll definitly be more of a jerk/asshole than her as well. Telling it straight and being an overall butt to others, especially to those with higher authority than herself like Twilight and Applejack to a lesser extent. Her racism towards Unicorns only extend to Unicorns with political power with the most notable exception being Celestia, but she'll be kinder to unicorns that are just average Joes and Janes like Vinyl and Lyra if I ever introduce her to the story.
This is Rainbow Dash if she isn't the fastest around so, she's super fast on her hooves and quick with the punches as she manged to hit Twilight before a spell could be cast. In my mind's eyes, dood... Any of the big time pros of the Wonderbolts, Shadowbolts, and Lightning Dust are the only competition she has in speed, Gilda won't be as fast but Griffons will be able to last far longer in a long drawn out race, I like Gilda so Gilda will be in this somehow, being a cockwarmer for Twilight is not going to be her role though.
The running gag of Pinkie being able to defy the rules of law like Discord actually turned me off of the character in Season 5, I still like her but I want to tone that down a bit. Also the fanon gag that Pinkie is the easiest character to fuck because she parties all the time. This Pinkie likes fun and all that and is hard to shame as she is willing to work in nothing but an apron. I actually do like the idea of Pinkie being chubbier than others, not diabetic fat but plump where it counts. Boasting the largest breasts of the six and biggest ass as well but maintain a cute adorable face, again, more so than the other five characters.
I also wanted her to be religious but naive and open to new things... incest is a thing I will get to in the story as I already know what to do with that. Because of this, Pinkie will probably be the last girl Twilight actually fucks if she does have sex with Twilight at all, dood. As for her skill set, despite having the most fat of the group, she is rather speedy, managing to barely keep up to Applejack and Fluttershy in a race thanks to her Earth poniness or Earther as I dubbed it... I might change it to Terran, dood. Again, thanks to Earth magic, Pinkie is also the second strongest of the six girls, no where near as strong as AJ but stronger than Dash and Rarity, her only two competition while Twilight struggles with the dumbbells.
Fluttershy, I love the idea of Flutterhsy being an Otaku, especially an Otaku that enjoys the ranchier stuff because I like girls that can explore that venue without immediately stating it as gross, disgusting, or calling you horrible for looking at it, dood. Her family life sort of happened that way though, dood. Yes, Fluttershy is technically nobility as her dad(?) is the lord of Cloudsdale and surrounding areas and her mom is a skank that does care about Fluttershy but has a distorted view of what is best for her little girl because she sees Fluttershy as herself, a happy girl that is willing to try anything once, including possible(?) incest with Twilight.
Because I wanted pegasi to be lean and thin, Fluttershy isn't as buxom as most of her humanized fanart shows her to be. At most third largest bust of the six, and is rather average in body shape, like you could actually see her body type out in the street every day, average. it's the sweater than gives her that big bust, dood.And being a pegasus, I want Fluttershy to be at least fast. Due to the fact that has a home life with animals and doesn't actually have as many chores as her pony-counterpart does, Fluttershy would probably be as weak if not a bit stronger than Twilight. Meaning if Fluttershy were to wrestle Twilight with magic blocked, put your money on Fluttershy because she will win that bout, dood, anyone else and she won't win.
Applejack is rather obvious, strongest and toughest because earth ponies are the strongest and toughest, dood.
With that said, she'd be the most muscular. She isn't top heavy like Pinkie or Rarity, and could probably turn an Apple into applesauce with her ass cheeks alone. Not horrifically muscular, but she has more visible muscles than say Rainbow does if you were to see her without her shirt on. Again, as a Earth, she'd be the strongest of the Six with one of the strongest of the main cast, dood. Thinking on ti, Applejack is more like her show counterpart than the other characters, if not more blunt and aggressive due to recent events.
As is the obvious, Applejack cares about her family and traditions above all else. Sweet Apple Acres is still around but it is owned by the Flimflam brothers (who aren't going to be portrayed as conmen but rather business men) after Granny Smith's death. She took this loss really hard and became a drinker, which is portrayed once when she first meets Twilight and knocks her to the ground. Drunk enough to fuck Twilight? Maybe, dunno for sure, dood. While she has some prejudice for unicorns (mostly Flim and Flam) she's usually willing to let new people prove that they are worth their respect.
Like she is the easiest character to describe because of how often it is done beause portraying Applejack as a slob or a fair maiden feels like sacrilege, dood. So there's not much I can do without making her a drunk with family problems stemming from the loss of a matriarch and the loss of her home.
Now for the elephant in the room: Barb, or Rule 63 Spike. Barb is the dotting little sister from the harem anime, that's the best I can describe her now, dood. While this was always planned, it wasn't done the best it could have been, I'll admit. The only factor that helps me stick to this path is the 'Greed' factor.
So lets look at Barb's body. She's skinnier than Rainbow Dash and shorter than the six main characters. She has a big tail that can curl around legs and whatnot and a nice cushy(if not scaly) ass to make up for the cutting board chest she has. And fangs, she has fangs and her spines act as a impromptu hairdo that requires hedge clippers to cut (don't worry, she doesn't get hurt from this, dood).
I do plan on writing a new body type for when Barb succumbs to her greed, making her an literal amazon in all cases. Stronger than Applejack, bustier than Pinkie, and larger than Bonez with sharper fangs, claws, and a seductive pose (if you find succubi from WoW hot) all to hunt down and make rough love to her big sister, which already sounds hilarous to me, dood.
As for her brain, intelligent but with a more confused outlook on what is truly right or wrong (she has wet dreams about Twilight) and is at the age where she is forced to follow her instincts (like fucking Twilight and hoarding stuff, though I barely focus on the latter). The only way her obsession made sense to me was that her bestest friend was Twilight herself, sure I've mentioned that she had two friends in Canterlot but in my mind, Barb became closer to Scootaloo than she did her Canterlot friends, sure they played but thats all they really did and I might get into why it wasn't as close of a relationship as it was, well I have to eventually, I just dunno what.
Prince Blueblood... I'll be honest, I want to give him more admirable traits but for reasons that you expect or find silly. Like he donates to an orphanage so that the children would stay away from his home and stop begging for his money. But I'd like to think that his personality outside his home or that isn't in the public eye is much the reverse of what has been seen. He is a perfect gentleman at parties and out in public, though he may ruffle some feathers here and there(like Shining armor's), but he isn't a complete ass hole, he just indulges in his vices a lot and frequently, dood. Unfortunatly, with the exception of his weird purple penis caused by magical implants, he is an Adonis in the body category.
Bonez, Blueblood's bodygaurd, is literally Iron Tager(Blazblue) if he had a family, dood. He is loyal to Blueblood but will bend the rules if he finds them to be deplorable and often apologizes for Blueblood's actions in private spaces. So along with bodygaurd duty, he is also Blueblood PR guy. He has a loving (if not bitch) of a wife, Mary, and his three children: Roxy, Sasha, and Dominic.
Due to their ages, no sex will occur involving any of Bonez' kids (Roxy is the oldest at 16) due to site rules, if there was no lolicon rule, there would have been a sex scene between Barb and Roxy for sure. Unlike most of the cast who appear more human, Bonez still appears more like the diamond dogs of the show but much larger, like he can see Celestia eye to eye tall. Since he won't be featured in any sex scenes, I won't comment about his dick, just know that Mary loves it enough to give birth to three children. I guess I should mention that Mary is pretty bulky and diamond dog shaped but still has definite female curves to show that she's a sexy bitch, dood, boobs being as big as Rarity's.
Trixie is boisterous with a body type slightly slimmer than Twilight's but still stronger because of Celestia's teachings. She'll forever be Twilight and Sunset's rival in magic and yes, an actual rival not like her appearance in the show. Not much to say as I didn't really give her much thought beyond 'Trixie being taught by Celestia', dood.
Sunset is as she is after her first movie, a kind but fun loving girl. Smart and magically powerful. She is definitely what Pinkie is what is commonly known to be, well not as sexual but close. She does care about Twilight and has a dark side, which was briefly seen, I'll explain that when I can and feel like it in the story, dood. Definitely a bigger build that Twilight, like a few notches below Rarity. Tomboyish while also beautiful. Nice boobs and a nice ass in other words.
Not much else comes to mind to be honest, I should get into Cheerilee or Vinyl but they are rather self-explanatory as VInyl is wiry but fit, a big bigger where it counts compared to Rainbow but not that much bigger. Cheerilee has Fluttershy's body type but bigger in the breast and ass department. Vinyl is cunning, crafty, and has some loyalty to Twilight because of her kinship with Silver Sparks. Cheerilee acts much like her show counterpart except a bit more flirty, dood. Much else I can think of to add to these two, dood.
If you got questions, comment and I'll try and answer them when I can, dood. (Except questions involving when I'm going to continue this story as I've already answer that, dood)
Thank you for reading, dood.
Just gonna say this Now, Twi is good the wa she is, also Twi wouldn't be a mary sue, if some one wanted her out of the way, they'd just need to run her over with a car.
4216330 I think so too, but then I'd have to write a chapter of how the guy who ran Twilight over dies a horrific death, dood.
4216777 Aren't friends wonderful?
4216826 The best, dood
Not bad. Can't stop the progress :3