TW 2: Feel The Edge

Just because I wrote it, doesn't mean I can't ruthlessly mock it with relevant parody songs

This was supposed to a short chapter. Really. It was just going to have Sunset and Twilight getting away and talking to Fluttershy, and then focusing on Trixie and her parting thoughts on her initial encounter with the Dazzlings. All told, like the short B-Side I was using as inspiration, it was going to be a fairly short interlude before the story moved on to bigger things in the coming chapters.

So much for that. XD

Anyway, this chapter did end up having more focus on Sunset and Twilight than on Trixie, whoops, but I think that's probably okay. I needed to set up the B-conflict here that I'd only hinted at in the first chapter. Cause if we're going to write an edgy dramatic take on EQG, we may as well go all the way - and I wanted to explore the idea of a Sunset who, while repentant and trying to learn how to be a better person, is still having trouble actually putting that into action, still retains a lot of that anger and bad attitude, and still bears a grudge against Twilight for her role in her downfall.

I also have worked out where this story is going, with a pretty solid outline. There'll be fifteen chapters in total, thirteen yet to come. That'll make things a bit easier now that I know what I'm doing.

Next chapter: Trixie receives an invitation from Adagio, while the Rainbooms plan and Sunset falls deeper into self-loathing.

Comments

[Phaoray]

Yays! More Trixie with a possible romance is always appreciated! I just pray the update is not going to be two years away again. : )

I liked the stuff with Fluttershy and Sunset, it makes sense how Sunset felt. One month of friendship with them against years of making their lives as unhappy as she could. I really liked Flutters in that section of the story, and hope she keeps up a decent part.

Buuut, I will admit, I am hear for the Trixie x Adagio, despite the issues that relationship will have. It does say something that Trixie, out of everyone at the school that was in some way bewitched by the sirens song, is the only one who tried to seek them out afterward. I am also curious on why Trixie feels so comfortable around them, she always seems alot more paranoid, or, at least, cautious of trusting others to me. I look forward to seeing if there is a reason, or if it's just love overriding her normal behavior.

[ColdGoldLazarus]

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Yays! More Trixie with a possible romance is always appreciated!

Yay!

I just pray the update is not going to be two years away again. : )

Hopefully not. It helps that I have a better idea of where I'm taking the story, now.

I liked the stuff with Fluttershy and Sunset, it makes sense how Sunset felt. One month of friendship with them against years of making their lives as unhappy as she could.

Yeah, she still has a lot to make up for.

I really liked Flutters in that section of the story, and hope she keeps up a decent part.

She will.

Buuut, I will admit, I am hear for the Trixie x Adagio, despite the issues that relationship will have.

Well, there will be more of that in the upcoming chapters.

It does say something that Trixie, out of everyone at the school that was in some way bewitched by the sirens song, is the only one who tried to seek them out afterward. I am also curious on why Trixie feels so comfortable around them, she always seems alot more paranoid, or, at least, cautious of trusting others to me. I look forward to seeing if there is a reason, or if it's just love overriding her normal behavior.

That's something I'll discuss more later on, but it essentially boils down to her already being kind of attracted, and the Spell adding to that to make her more 'magnetized' toward the Sirens than she otherwise would be.
(Not actually spoilers)