Revisions Compete! · 8:52am Jul 23rd, 2016
Just finished my pass through chapter ten, which means that I've officially gone through and revised every chapter of PGS up until the most recent one. While the story's still far from perfect, it's at least better than it was, and I don't cringe quite as hard when I reread it. Go read it and see for yourself, if you like.
But the big deal here is that I now feel free to continue working on the next chapter of The Solid Snake and Twilight Sparkle Power-Hour. The tension rises in the aftermath of the escape from Dodge proper. What kind of vehicle sits behind Cherry's barn? How deeply into alcoholism will Twilight descend before her friends stage an intervention? For whom does Snake's heart doki? For whom does Trenton's heart doki?
The answers to all these questions will come to you soon enough, along with more questions which will be raised, which I will then proceed not to answer. 
The vehicle's narrative purpose is to reveal that taking Dodge really was a crucial element of the plan, and that Pegasus Wings actually are fed entirely on a diet of cherries. Twilight isn't really an alcoholic because that's just Posh making a joke, but both she and Snake do spend most of the chapter high after being drugged by some of the surviving zombies, who it turns out were actually just stoners all along. Snake lusts for REVENGE (his first love), and it is tragic and heartbreaking, especially the masturbation scene. And in a brutally realistic twist worthy of GRRM himself, Trenton accidentally slips and dies while showering with Rainbow Dash, such is life.
4108436 I didn't tell you all of that so you could just blab it out so casually.
4108436 But in hindsight, Twilight's remark about P.W. trying to kill Equestria by depriving it of apples is very significant, no?
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You are a drone, existing to serve the hive. You toil, you create, you die, and then another takes your place. Complain not of betrayals, for you are expendable, and therefore your fate is irrelevant.
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