And you think my *clop* is bad purple prose... · 3:30am Jul 17th, 2016
Here's how bad it gets when I try to write cosmic adventure to deal with my pain levels. Long story:
Her wings flared again, and she raised Midwife high, her divinely titanic muscles rippling with unrelenting power. She did have cause to worry. He was leaving a trail of destruction, it was true. One that was getting smaller as he moved, and not because the number of swarming parasite ur-divinities and demiurges was thinning. Even the 'sky' was growing thick with unreal horrors best thought of as the nightmares of locust demons; he couldn't head up, and didn't have time to open a gate, even if his inexperienced magic would let him shift out-plane at all.
But hers would. And while she might not be forged from the unimaginable might of the Void King and the Triune Queen, she was Luna Selene Solutae. The Unbound Moon; Warmistress of Equestria, and the deadliest combatant on Epona still. Strength, she had in sinews more than mighty enough, and speed and skill as well. She had them all, the divine, arcane, and occult magic of a millenia-old alicorn, and Midwife had returned to her.
Yeah, let's just say that this 'story' isn't going to be seeing the light of day much except me to mock myself. It's also an example of why anyone who does like my stuff should really thank my editors for smacking this out of me.
You want bad purple prose? I got some riiiight here:
From my original fantasy epic that I continue to neglect.
Honestly, what you shared isn't that bad at all. I've seen worse, at least. Much, much worse.
4096857 You want a competition? :P
Behold, what comes next!
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I have 40 chapters worth of this kind of stuff... You honestly think you can best me for most purple!?
(that was awesome, btw... It's all about your audience! This stuff sells within the right circles)
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Godsdamnit, TB! Don't you dare tease me with this, or I might just pull a Misery(not really) and force you to complete it!
4096881 I can compete. :P Especially since YOURS is neat and MINE is terribad. :P
4096919 Dude, didn't you read it? It's horrible. And that's only barely touching on the self indulgencies regarding Hopper, which is where it gets super bad. I posted this to mock it!
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Do you know who else often delved into excessively florid language, when the mood struck them?
John Ronald Reuel Tolkien.
And yes, I did read it. That is why I'm requesting MOAR!
4096940 Tolkien was an Oxford linguistics professor who spent a lifetime creating a magnificent world for his amazing languages to live in, drawing from a vast array of sources. I'm not sure that I've managed to out-write a fifteen year old with actual talent. -.-;;
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Pictures are worth a thousand words.
You think you're giving us this:
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While I am seeing this:
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Please, don't be so adamant in your self-deprecation!
4096961 ;_; I deal poorly with praise.
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You have said so before, but I feel the need to explain myself.
I have an active imagination. I love the ways in which the written word can be wielded; like a scalpel, delicate and precise; a hammer, overwhelming and yet ponderous; or, in your case, a glaive, at times a tad unwieldy, yet devastating and wondrous to see in action. My mind's eye is strong in its work to bring to life the scenes I read, yes; but the fuel of your words, hewn from the forest of this world you've created, is most helpful in satiating this need I feel, to witness every corner of the universe you have woven with your words.
4096994 All I can say is thank you, then, you and Nine both.
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i'm not sure about NC, but you can thank me by getting this drabbled bit of prose into postworthy condition, and publishing it here.
4097050 I can't because raisins.
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Because it would spoil whether or not Hopper wins his mating fight with Luna? And... certain results. Yes. These are excellent raisins. You'll have to wait until the end of Luna's hunt for it and by then we'll have all forgotten about it. *nods*
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...I won't forget, and as I've said before, I have an abundance of patience. Everything's eventual, as they say!
I do kind of like this as it gives a slightly clearer picture of where everyone stands power-wise due to the many comparative statements. I am the kind of person who likes to reduce everything down to numbers, and precise power measurements that are so common in purple prose are lovely for that.
4097342 Eh. Overflowery and overwrought descriptions just cloud matters, honestly.
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Okay, which one of you got to my spouse? I'm being pushed to finish more. Just so you know, the rest of it is pure hurt/comfort with crud like this:
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One should not mess with a being trained in astral projection. However, I simply asked the universe to inspire you through the most efficient motivation. The fact that it is your wife pushing you to do this is merely the will of the zeitgeist made manifest.
4098348 I merely think that extended descriptions in brawls are fine. In non-brawls, however, I agree, it gets dodgy