Welp

Chapter posted. And... nobody gives a shit, aparently.

Huh.

Well... One thin up. Two things to go. Wait for them, I guess.

...

No, really. The chapter is bad or something? Because... well, nobody seems to give a shit about it. And that's... surprisingly not dissapointing. I'm just... confused.

I mean, what the fuck...?

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[jojoyasmin]

I'm currently reading it, but I saw the notification thing and ended up here in a new tab.

MANY FUCKS ARE BEING GIVEN RIGHT NOW!

Now to continue on with reading

[Cognito]

The shits I give are invisible(not that you would want to see, I mean, why would you?).
Anywho, I feel that the latest chapter is... boring, It feels like a basic recap of the story, and adds little to the overall plot. The story is laid out like a script, which belongs more in a play than a story. Great, now I feel bad for doing this to a guy that has the courage to post stories .

[Aragon]

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FEEDBACK! OH GOD FEEDBACK!

Ahem.

Don't feel bad, that's exactly what I wanted to hear. You made my day, just because now I can try to make the story better Hmm. It's boring? Well, that explains a lot. It seems like I got excited with the "let's explain everything with the characters saying things" again, but I really wanted to tell some things, and this was planned since the characters had the book with the story. Anyway, I guess I'll revise the chapter with that in mind.

About the script... well... my format is a little special, so in fact this is a script. Sorta. Maybe. That's one of the reasons why EQD will not feature it. I'm afraid that, in a conversation between Pinkamena and the ponies, I can't do a lot. And narration with Aragón felt... boring to me.

Oh, the irony. I fucking hate irony when it comes to bit my ass instead of, y'know, help me.

Luckily, next chapter will add more to the story.

[Lucky Roll]

Yes, uh, I know I wrote earlier that I'd check out the new chapter, but I was too busy playing Dragon Age: Origins and Dragon Age 2 simultaneously doing non-nerdy things in a non-nerdy manner, slacking and just generally being manly that I postponed it until now.

Anyway, if you want technical feedback, then I found a few tiny problems:

"I think a lot of things. For example, Aragón just said 'shit' and there was no censorship."
I don't know if it's deliberate, but Aragón didn't said "shit" before this comment.

"Seeing as the ponies wanted to read too, he lowed the book and put it on the ground."
I think it should be "lowered", not "lowed". Unless cows are involved.

"You always are a step aside everybody else"
Maybe you mean "ahead" instead of "aside"?

NOW, I GO!

EDIT: Also, there's a [color] in there.

[Crack-Fic Casey]

Was looking for that blog you did about how to get featured... Man, times change, huh?

[Aragon]

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reading this blog and being like wait where's the joke. did i really post this?
I was 17! Times sure change