Sep
30th
2015
Rarity's Makeover. · 8:16am Sep 30th, 2015
When I submitted this story to the site, I thought it was going to be accepted with open arms, but I noticed it hasn't been well-received.
And who do I blame for this?
Why myself, of course.
Reflecting on the story, I think I made the main character too hostile, and too unsympathetic. The open-ended nature of the ending must have disappointed people too, but I want to make a sequel, not a chapter continuation.
I understand now why my story didn't do so well. I am going to try harder next time, to make up for this. I hope that the fimfiction community can overlook my mediocre first story.
I was about to read your story when I saw how long it's been since you were last online. Don't stress so much about how well your story is received. If it's mediocre, you can just learn to improve it. I'm fairly sure that readers on this site won't hold a failed attempt against you. This isn't Youtube. I've found most people/ponies on this site are pretty nice. There are exceptions, but don't worry about it. I'll give your story a read and I hope you come back to FimFiction.
I hope you come back to this. It has a lot of potential.
I don't know if you'll ever see this, but I do hope that you come back around. Your story has potential and I personally wouldn't call it a failure. I'd only suggest making some changes so it's a drama rather than dark, such as:
1: Twilight has been working on a way to send him back home, using the information about his world to pinpoint it.
2: She mentions not mentioning his changing soul so he wouldn't worry, because she had hoped to succeed in sending him back before he changed.
3: It's determined that Rarity's enchanted beauty products quickened the process of his soul adapting to the new universe.
4: Twilight reassures him that it's possible to return him back home and restore his humanity, and that it will only be a matter of time.
5: All that helps to mollify him once he cools down.
Either way, hope you've been doing well.