Thanks and a correction · 7:53pm Jul 13th, 2015
Okay, to all of you who've read Twilight the Terrible, a HUGE thank you. I'm already close to 500 words into the new chapter and am going full-bore. Also...
Okay, you folks were right. The bit with Rainbow Dash was a bit contrived. I've altered it to this:
Rainbow Dash suddenly flew close to Luna and leaned in as close as she could. "What is she doing?" she asked, her voice barely audible. "She realizes she's gotta be over here for us to use the Elements of Harmony on her, right?"
The young filly's head snapped up and the pillar of magic around her horn flared. “W-what?” She whipped her head around and stared at Fluttershy with her glowing white eyes, that were even now brightening. “W-what does she mean by that? Use the Elements of Harmony on me!?”
Silence descended upon the throne room. Nightmare Moon slapped a hoof against her forehead and dragged it down her muzzle.
Luna shook her head and looked to a wide-eyed Rainbow Dash. "There was no way you could've known her senses would be enhanced, as well. Save anything for what is to come."
There, a little less "STUPID!" from her. ;) Again, thanks for reading. The end... is nigh!
MUCH better, thanks. Again, Rainbow Dash is something of an idiot, it's one of the reasons why she's best pony. But she wasn't as much as you had her being. This is much better.
I think I preferred the first version. It amused me and Rainbow Dash does have a tendency to act/speak without thinking. Oh well.
I like this alteration, before it was just a little too silly for the serious consequences it brought, imo.