The day that stopped · 8:41pm Jul 10th, 2015
Hey guys, thanks to the people who read this storyThe day that stopped
I would like some feedback on what I need to improve upon and just constructive criticism. ive written stories on FimFiction before, but this is one where I would like to have some feedback.
A little bit about this story:
It was a personal story that I had trouble writing because I hope this never happens in my lifetime.
This story came about when I got a text from my mom who was joking around. I asked where is everyone then she replies dead.
So this all started out as a joke, a dark one at that.
If anyone wants to give me any feedback on this story (good or bad) or justs wants to tell me what I could improve on, that would be very much appreciated