Comparison · 2:33am Sep 8th, 2014
Hello my faithful viewers.
I've been looking through some of the other fics in the 'A New World'verse. I'm going to go out and say here and now that I suggest you read them. They're pretty good.
But anyways, as I was reading, I can't help but notice something. Am I on-par with the others? I mean, I know some of my other works I usually look at and think superb, but maybe that's because they don't have much or at all competition.
I just wanted to ask if you guys liked my addition to the verse compared to others and if you would suggest anything that would help me make it a better experience for the lot of you. (Because that's why I write. To make others smile...or not, if I'm writing a dark/sad scene, but that happens sometimes.) So what do you like so far?
{Extra note: Possible reactions if this fic were to crossover with the others. I know it probably won't happen, since I decided to take this place in Zebrica, but eh, possible future.}
While yours is unique from the majority of the fics set in the verse. Commander Sev and his rebellion are pokemon. No humans, no romance(unless Sev actually gets lucky with Lightning, tails crossed.). Though with the commanders it makes a large cast that I believe is still being developed.
That being said, you have solid main characters, Sev, the Zebrica King and the sister(the name escapes me at the moment). Sev is enjoyable, at first I thought he was a madman for trying to fight humans, like Mojo Jojo fighting the Powerpuff Girls. But as I see more of his character and his relationship with Lia, he is becoming more like a Cobra Commander, but with a heart.
The only thing that leaves a blank for me so far is what the main plot will be for the spin-off. That being said, almost every side-story lacks a over-arching plot(mine included and according to some opinions the main story as well). You have been dropping several hints about the general and not to mention that scene at the end of the last chapter with the old hunter. So you definietly are giving me ideas on where you are going with it
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If you want to compare your story to some of the (personal choice) best side-fics, then it would recommend:
A New Way, A New Game- don't let the summary fool you. Give it a read and you will be pleasantly surprised.
A New Way, A New Ranger- You know, with the sweet cover art of an Arcanine and Ninetails. Out of all the romance tagged stories, I find that this one makes it feel...right.
That's all I can think of at the moment.
2436734 Read both of those and currently tracking them.
Thanks for the boost.
I just got a bit antsy because the last chapter pretty much didn't get many comments as I was hoping and they weren't exactly that...describing about what they liked.
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I think the reason you didnt get as many comments for last chapter as before, is mostly because the story itself is starting to set in. No real bomb has been dropped...yet
That being said, I would like your opinion on my own sidestories. People leave comments, but I do like a bit of critique.
Been sincere, I am not someone to do self promotion, other than asking for other writers to add one of my guys on their story, that's is. So I won't say if younatre on par with the rest, mostly because I am one of the rest.
But I will tell you what I think of your story. Is interesting and fresh, and that is all I need to follow it.
Hope our stories can cross one day in the future.
2436734 I think your comment is spot on right.
But I have to ask: what is wrong with the summary? No, really, I am not satisfied with it and would love to have it changed.
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Whenever I see certain words in the summaries I lose all at tension entirely in the plot or concept.
. Like solider in Equestria, or kid with paralyzing childhood trauma, strangely powered individual enters Equestria to tear it up, etc.
These concepts are done almost daily and it is just tiresome. I can go into a bit more detail concerning your own, but the one thing I want to mention right now is to put the connection to Zeus' story at the bottom of your summary. It may be his universe, but it is your story, concept and characters. Grab the bull by the horns.
2439285 That my good sir is a very good advice, thanks!