Tiny shortstory, and Chapter 1 · 11:10am Jul 19th, 2014
Foal shoes for sale: Never worn.
by M. Nova
I think that tells a certain story, don't you?
Yes, I'm up damn late. Probably won't be up this late again, but it doesn't matter. What DOES matter is that I just went back and prettied up chapter 1 a fair bit. Not massive changes, really, but it was still a case of having rushed through and not putting things as eloquently as they should be. (Those of you who saw the story's original incarnation saw a much worse case of this)
But now, I dare to say, our intro chapter is in line with chapter 3 and beyond. Hurray! 
Tomorrow I'll probably do the same with chapter 2, or try to. That one intimidates me, but it may not be so bad as my mind plays it up to be. It's just that that was the one I got stuck and petered out on a few months ago, which much reminded me of how much work I wasn't doing for a majority of the year beforehand.
It'll probably be fine, though, but either way it should be done in time. Hopefully doing so will eliminate the reason for the story's first downvote since being rewritten, eh? 
(Chances are it may have been a deeper reason than that, but what matters is that I do what I can to improve what I have, and with chapter 2 touched up a bit I'll have no regrets going forward.)
Oh, and one more thing for those of you who read this far: Just like last time I said I'd take a break, I immediately dived back in and cranked out like 1k+ words or something. If I hadn't gotten hung up on bringing the first two chapters up to par, I'd probably have another scene written. Maybe. So that's nice.
Cleaning things up is always good, although the one issue that really stood out to me was chapter 5 which really felt like it needed another full scene added to the end to get to know Tinkleshine a bit more before the story really got going.
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Who's Tinkleshine? *nudge nudge*
And I agree. I may turn my gaze there as well, but especially after this wee detour I'd like to focus on moving forward. However, that part of the chapter was rather abrupt and should be expanded into a proper scene. It will be done, or I intend it to be, I just can't say when.
I could always use some suggestions over Skype as kinda-editor-ness, though. The other half of it is that I don't know what to do with the scene. Maybe if I had my brain poked at a bit this would change.
2301320 Sounds good, and I'll take another look at it when I have time and see what I can come up with.