Apr
7th
2014
The S.H.I.P.P.I.N.G. Machine Sequel · 8:57pm Apr 7th, 2014
So, I enjoyed writing a date between Trixie and Fluttershy enough that I decided to start writing another story starring them. I was hoping for some feedback since I've just started drafting it.
I was thinking of making it a bit more serious than the comedic date shown in The S.H.I.P.P.I.N.G. Machine. I'm thinking of making it star Trixie moving to Ponyville...as Princess Twilight's personal student!
I'm sure it's been done before, but this story isn't about Twilight. It's about Trixie trying to fit in around Ponyville and her burgeoning romance with Fluttershy.
I can't wait.
Lookin' forward to it.
Eh, I'm not fond of the thought of Trixie becoming Twilight's student, It has been done alot and her personality just doesn't seem to match with it. I just think she'd consider it too demeaning. I could more see say 'Twilight putting an ad out, or asking the Princesses to help her find a student. Trixie hearing about it and agreeing in a more roundabout way.' Like Trixie acting more like they are learning from eachother for mutual benefit, though Twilight is paying her as Trixie's time is precious. Unless its a unpaid student thing, but Twilight I assume gets a stipend so not really sure why Trixie wouldn't.
Now with that said, I felt the romance between Trixie and shy in The S.H.I.P.P.I.N.G. Machine was frigging fantastic and would love to see it continue! So many potential fun/dramatic/sad/romantic situations you can do with it! How does the town react to Trixie's return? Is Trixie going to be just as paranoid about being lynched in the town as she was in the last story, and if so is there legitimate reason for her concern? How will friends react should they find Trixie sneaking to Flutters place, especially since Fluttershy didn't tell anyone who the pony she went out on the date with was? Will Angel continue to sabotage them, or did he learn his lesson? Will Pinkie try to throw her a party only for her to hide and not show up? *note: EVERY story has Pinkie doing this, but not once has Trixie decided not to go despite how bad of an idea it always seems.* Will Flutters help Trixie as in the last story she seemed pretty stressed/paranoid/upset about her life in general.
Also curious on where Trixie is actually staying. I kinda wonder since she said she went from one town to the next trying to find her certain somepony if she has a wagon or if she's kinda become a drifter sleeping in parks.
..........Ok, so I kinda rambled a bit there. In conclusion, I approve of this choice in sequels, though I am on the fence depending on how you address the student thing with Twilight. Feel free to pm me or anything if you need any feedback. I like helping Trixie writers when I can.
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I was afraid of the situation being trite, but I do have a plan for Trixie to be Twilight's unwitting student.
A lot of your questions will be addressed, though, honestly, I hadn't considered Pinkie's reaction just yet. One thing I'm not afraid to give away that Angel and Trixie do not and will not get along. Probably ever.
Your feedback was helpful. Thank you.
Yes please.
Why can't it just be about Trixie moving to Ponyville because she wants a relationship with Fluttershy? That in itself could bring enough drama. Instead of being Twilight's student, have her work at Quills and Sofas or something. Somewhere that doesn't already have a member of the Mane Six working there.