Story #5 In Another Pony's Hooves · 5:32pm Apr 7th, 2014
Okay, wow, that turned out to be longer then I thought it would. Amazing how only 4 days of in-story time event items can turn out longer then anticipated in full text.
Anyway In Another Pony's Hooves is my first attempt at a simultaneous event lines story. How'd I do? I'm especially looking for feedback on chapter three. I'm not sure why but something felt off about it to me, yet nothing I tried to do editing it seemed to help. Did something feel off there to you? And if so I'd love to hear what you think needed to be tweaked/changed.
Like most of my stories I wrote the basic script in my head around the time session 2 was airing and adapted it to accommodate session 3 and now 4.
I was actually rather amused how little I had to change to accommodate flight to the finish. I originally envisioned Scootaloo's bed being on the wall opposite the door wall. So other then moving her bed and changing the color of her rug I didn't have to change anything about her room to match cannon.
Timeline wise this would more or less right after When the Sky Isn't High Enough, and fun and pointless fact it is actually the last of the three sights of interest Scootaloo sees in When Wings are Earned.
Can't think of anything else to ramble on about this story, so until next time, have fun out there.
