EXTENDED AUTHOR'S NOTE FOR IE - THIRD CHAPTER · 5:42pm Mar 11th, 2014
Holy cow, 7070 words. This thing just keeps getting longer and longer.
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CONTAINS MAJOR SPOILERS FOR [CH.3] OF [INJURING ETERNITY]
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There we go everyone, the third chapter of Injuring Eternity. I'm so glad I posted it already. As you can see, I've abandoned the idea of finishing the entire story before posting. This is mainly because this is getting very long and I no longer have an estimate of how many more chapters this will have. Originally, I thought that all three scenes from this chapter would fit in nicely in like three pages.
The time-gap between Chapter 2 and 3 is longer than the one between Ch. 1 and 2, as you may have noticed. This is mainly due to the fact that I've been kind of busy doing school stuff, and also because I went away on vacations for a week. I would have loved to keep writing, but it is apparently frowned upon to want to stay in the hotel writing instead of going out and being a tourist. Damn you, social norms!
So, yeah, most of this chapter was written on my tiny iPhone screen during the several 8+ hour long bus trips I had to take this week. Say what you want, but you can't deny I'm not dedicated to my writing. It's pretty awful having to write so much with a ridiculously tiny keyboard.
Another reason the chapter took longer was that I recently acquired my own copy of Scrivener, this really cool writing program, and it has the option of being able to write all kinds of scenes and then compiling them into one document. Because of this, I've sort of written everything in disorder, so I actually have more scenes from the last chapter already written than I had from this chapter. It was an interesting experience, though, because each scene thus felt like if I was writing a mini-chapter.
Ok, so, as for the story.
The most important change here is that I switched the narrative point of view from Twilight to Rarity. I had originally intended on keeping the entire story from Twi's POV, but I suddenly found myself really wanting to write Rarity being all smitten towards Twilight. I notice that a lot of the stories I've read are set from Twilight's POV, so I always get Twilight going jelly for Rarity, but I never get to see Rarity being the one going jelly for Twilight. It was really fun to write because I enjoy writing a Rarity that says "Twilight, you are absolutely adorable" but thinks "SHE IS TOO ADORABLE I WANT TO KISS THE LIFE OUT OF HER". I don't know, I just like the idea of her secretly going all mushy for Twilight.
I'm a sucker for fluff.
Another thing that happened is that, in the first draft, the chapter started with Twilight and Rarity inside the train, already about to get to Manehattan. I ended up swapping it for the train station scene halfway through because of plot-reasons and because I felt it would flow better. Or something. I don't know.
We also have Coco in here. I chose Coco because it made sense to me that she and Rarity would stay in contact, and because I don't really like adding OCs unless it's for a very brief conversation (like the one between Rarity and the barista at the coffee shop). I also added her because she isn't developed enough for me to actually "write her wrong" canonically. I honestly have no idea what has become her fanon personality, but I think it was pretty close to what little we saw of her in canon, and that's good enough for me.
I notice that, as I write this, my headcanon idea of Twilight is her being much more similar to Cadence body-type wise than she is in canon. I mean, she's taller in canon, but I've seen so many drawings of her alicorn form being like Cadence, that I guess it kinda stuck? It also has to do with the fact that she's way older here, so let's all pretend that she'll keep growing a little. Also, because, I like the idea of her being noticeably taller than Rarity.
On a side-note, the raritwi contest is going to be ending soon (the mod there was cool enough to give us more time) so this is why you're getting the chapter now instead of in a few days. I have to admit I'm a little nervous because I'm up against some really great writers (not to mention more experienced writers), but technically everyone wins because we're getting more raritwi fics. I'm glad it's ending, though, because this was my first time entering a fanfiction contest ever, and I was feeling the pressure.
What else, what elseeeeee…
Oh yeah! I actually went back and modified Ch. 1 and 2. It wasn't anything major, mostly just grammar and minor plot-things.
As for the next chapter, I have no idea when that's coming out. I have much more free time, though, so hopefully the wait will be less than it was for this one.
Also, for the sake of my silly joke, let's all pretend L'Oréal is a thing that exists in Equestria.
YOU CAN'T PROVE IT DOESN'T EXIST.
