Why Ralph?! Why? · 2:57am Jul 4th, 2013
Seriously, why is Ralph wrecking an ugly go-kart the most saddest thing in the world to me right now?
Spoiler in link for movie if you haven't seen it yet.
Ralph! You dream wrecker!
I have seen many movies, and in doing so sat through many many depressing, disheartening, and heartbreaking scenes. The only other movie that has a scene I have to look away from is Old Yeller. I can't watch him shoot his dog. Apparently, I can't watch Ralph crush a go-cart either. These two scenes should not be on the same level of emotion, but they are. Penelope has this blood curdling scream in the background while he's doing it too. It's just... Gah!
All my feels!
Who wants an update on how the chapter's coming along?
I want one!
So, here I am tearing along on my writing craze when I look up and see.... 30 pages. Still not done, but mostly done. Thusly, no more chapter splits! Graaargh! I can't believe I wanted it to all be one chapter long. that'd be like... 50 pages of chapter. The heck is wrong with my head?!
The more pertinent question is 'When will it be out?' If it were just me? I'd probably have this frigger out by next weekend. Well it'll take a wee bit longer this time round. Frazzled Pony is gonna scan it for my many errors, and I'm not sure how long that will take.
In other news:
The Equestrian Critics Society finally got around to reviewing the fic as well! 5.5/10 ain't that hot of a rating is it? Ah well. The main complaint was that all the many plot lines, which they thought were each good ideas (too many good ideas as it were), are dragging the pacing down.
In my mind, that's like saying:
"There's too much story in this story! Take out some story already! You have broken story quota limits and cannot be allowed to continue! This story is bursting at the seams with story, and she's ready to blow Cap'n!"
Certainly it's a fair point. There's a lot of plots and subplots hanging around here. If you're the type of reader that is so focused on one or two story lines over the rest and only reading for them, you're going to have a hard time reading my fic, since I tend to try to give most of them a fair shot in the spotlight. As for me, I love that kind of thing. I love a story that has a ton of things going on at once, and often I can get bored reading the same focus the whole way through the story. If I'm going to read a long piece of fiction, it's gotta have multiple layers of story going through it.
The other big complaint was the Lavender unicorn syndrome I wasn't aware I was subjecting you all to. That will change! Or, at least, I'll try to change it anyway. I apologize for the grief it has caused you all.
Apparently, together these two issues were worth 4.5 stars. Eep! Well, who am I to question a rating? It is my first try at ever writing ... well... anything. For all I know, maybe that's a .5 above the average. That ain't bad for a noob.
You know, I was already inspired by a song to write this 5.5 to begin with, but I'm saving which one until the Epilogue. However, other songs have come to my attention that really fit in with the fic's theme and the characters. I'd love to listen to playlist of them, if people can think of a couple.
This one's for Free!
(I so love this one too, I can picture which lyric fits what character, I can even see which scene aligns with each line! If you can too, feel free to share, my interest has been piqued!)
Catch yas all next time,
Cheers!
Meh, I think the multilayered plot is one of the strongest points of the fic. It's hard to do that and even harder to do it half as well as you do.
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Well the critic did admit it's difficulty, in fact he said it's so difficult, one just shouldn't do so. You can find the full review here
He quotes this one on me:
A trope!
I'm not sure why people automatically assume tropes are bad things. A trope is actually just a common occurrence. If you tried to write without hitting any, your story is probably gonna blow. At any rate, Apparently soaps use this all the time, and soap operas are bad, right? Certainly professional writers never do up the scripts for them. And even more certain shows like 'Heroes' and 'Lost' and 'Firefly' and 'Star Trek' would never be seen using such a thing.
I don't really understand this particular gripe, but if the pacing is bad in a way I can fix, feel free to offer suggestions, I'm open to them!
The review was, however, useful. He managed to elaborate on an issue with my sentence structure you mentioned before. With the new information I shall become that much better!
1186634 Eenope, don't see it.
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'it' as in reference to what? The review? The trope? Are the links working? the story layers? the elaboration? I am so confused
1186799 The issue. I mean, yeah, trope, but it's not like it ever slows to a crawl and the flight remains the main focus of the story very strongly.
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I hoped it was as well, but yeah. Obviously some folk are in agreement with the critique, I've been getting more down votes than up votes these days. T-T
It matters little. This is the last leg of the trip down story lane. Only three chapters left, an epilogue and some editing, then I'll toss it at EqD to see where it stands and work on other things in the mean time. Maybe I'll try something a bit shorter next time round id attention spans have really shrunk to this point.