Some Writing Scraps · 7:40am Jan 10th, 2013
So, my good friend and editor was helping a fellow brony out by giving him some writing exercises. He asked me to read them and give feedback, and then asked me if I would like to join in. I decided "why not?," I could always use the practice. So, I was given a prompt to do a follow up to the original scene, involving RD saving Rarity. The prompt was Sweetie notices Rarity begins acting odd towards Rainbow Dash and becomes confused and seeks out advice. The stipulation? First person. No narration. Only thoughts and dialogue. The following ensued:
*15 Minutes*
> No narration
> Thoughts and Dialogue Only
*30 Minutes*
*45 Minutes*
It wasn't fair.
“Rairity and Rainbow Dash sitting in a tree, K. I. S. S. I. N. G.”
“Cut it out Scootaloo! That's not it at all!”
“Oh really? What did you say happens when someone brings up Rainbow Dash around her? That her eyes get all 'fluttery' and she sighs and swoons a lot?”
“That doesn't mean she's in love! She gets that way about a lot of things. Like fabrics or dresses.”
“Oh really? And what does she say when she sees those fabrics? Huh? Huh?”
Don't cry.
“That she LOVES them right?”
Don't cry.
Too late.
Why did I even bother coming to these two... two meanie heads anyway.
What do they know?
“Sweetie Belle!”
“Sweetie Belle! Wait up!”
“Oof!-What the hay was that for?”
“For being 'ah block head! That's what! Sweetie! Sweetie come back!”
“Leave me alone!”
Why don't they understand?
“Hey Sweetie, hold on a cotton pickin second!”
“Why, so you can tease me for having some freak of a sister who ran off with another filly. I've had enough of tonight, thank you very much!”
“Your sister ain't a freak Sweetie, and neither are you. Scoots was just picking some fun-”
“-Oof!-”
“Weren't you. Scoots.”
“Yeah, sorry, o.k.? I was only teasing.”
… as if.
“I mean it Sweetie Belle, I really do! … Look, your sister's crushing on RD right? And that means that MY big-sorta-sis is just as much of a freak as your big sis, and anything that's cool with Rainbow Dash is cool with me! So... friends?”
“Yeah... friends.”
Sometimes its good to cry, I guess.
“Hey! Waitta minute! If RD and Rarity get hitched, won't that make you two sisters or something?”
…
“Eww, gross.”
“Bleh!”
“What is WRONG with you?”
“I'm just say'n makes sense and all that.”
“Rainbow Dash isn't even my sister, geez.”
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So, yeah, just a little bit of pony for you all to enjoy. What do you guys think?
Also, would there be any interest in me making an idea bin post to hold all of my fic ideas? I ask because some aren't likely to get written ever and are just funny on their own. Plus, I could get some feedback and motivation to write more. I have something like 4 ideas I can begin work on right away, and a bunch others just bouncing around.
Anyway, pony on my friends.
Nyronus~
WHAT IS THIS STORY. I WANT.
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... so I take it you liked it?
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Affirmative, it sounds interesting and enticing. I'ma gonna guess it's a romantic comedy? Amiright?
That was cute.
And I like the thought of an idea post. Sounds like fun.