A minor alteration...

I made a minor edit to the most recent chapter. There were two little words that had become a massive pain in my arse working on the next chapter. They were, 'to her'. It was leading to rabbit holes of character arguments that spiraled into hellish domains where finding a feasible 'out' for Sunset grew dire indeed. After several attempts I've decided to just rip out the root cause of the problem. Now, I could have just ignored it and carried on, but that felt more disengenous than just treating the previous chapter as a bit of a living document and making that itsy bitsy little teeny weeny tweaky weaky.

Another thing I will probably, within the 99%, be doing is after next chapter switching perspectives for a chapter to minor characters so we see the fecal matter hitting the rotary device from other angles that are a bit closer to specific pieces of the action. At present they'll be; a girl at the perimeter making the trenches, a boy who climbs up the cliffside near the resource silos and enters into a series of mine shafts, and the final perspective will be Flash Sentry as he goes in through the hole cut into the warehouse.

I've got ideas for all sorts of mechanical and gribbly monsters for our little children's army to face. Oh, the carnage to come...

Comments

[Kapuchu]

Oh hey, I missed these blogs Rants about edits in published chapters, because you realised some mistake or belatedly became unhappy with a passage or two!

Maybe I should pick up Sunset of Battle, see if it piques my interest like Myths and Birthrights did in ages past.

[Tundara]

5751976

Its a Warhammer 40k crossover (in theory?), so its a bit darker than Myths. I've been told it isn't very warhammer-ish though as the story progresses, so mileage may vary?

[Kapuchu]

5751979
I'm somewhat familiar with Warhammer. I paint some of their models, and have absorbed a bit of the lore and such through osmosis as other people talk about it

[Shalifi]

Super interesting story. This and student 32 are my favorites at the moment. I'm glad your making progress with the story.