Second Revamp republish! (Chapter 3-4) · 5:36pm Jul 27th, 2023
These chapters are difficult to work with. It focuses on the two cousins first met up, as I re-read it I notice I rushed up the whole thing. I followed a piece of old advice, to keep it simple and straightforward. But I don't think that tip would work. So I added some more dialogue and scenarios to make it a bit more interesting. Marble is pretty hard to add some lines to her since she doesn't talk but making Lime talk a lot in the chapters should be good enough compensation for now.
I also made another chapter scene to picture how they first met. I did it before but with an old dialogue. It was a mouthful to read so I made another one, hopefully with a better line.
As of now, I'll continue with the rest of the chapters, as for the new cover it'll be done along with the next republish. Thank you again for your patients and support. Hopefully, I'll finish the republish as soon as I can to add new chapters and new characters. Now, enjoy the revamps.
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