after the night rewrite

so I’ve been told that after the night sucks, and I kinda agree. So if you are wondering where chapters 2 and 3 are, I am currently rewriting them, completely redoing them and changing what i had in mind.

essentially i am rewriting everything after chapter 1.

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[Nugget27]

by the way, first draft of the first thousand words:

After the sun rose, I found very little reason to get out of bed. There really was not much of a reason to get out of bed. Sure, I was alive, but I had no reason to really want to live. I grumbled and groaned, rolling onto my stomach, figuring there really was not a point in lying around and moping over how my thousand year long relationship wouldn’t last. Sure, Luna was stuck on the moon, but I guess people change. It’s just a shame that she never really even thought to give me a chance, and just immediately dumped me after seeing me for the first time in forever. 

Given that this was my room, there was a pretty solid chance that some of my stuff was still around. For instance, the nightstand on my side of mine and Luna’s old bed. My body felt numb and tired from the severe lack of sleep I had, but I kept going. I opened the drawer and found a bag of bits and a necklace of some sort. I chuckled, recognizing what this was. It was practically yesterday since I saw this thing, after all; I just woke up and apparently a thousand years had passed. You see, this was gonna be an idea I brought from my old world.

Ponies did wear jewelry, especially if those ponies were royalty. Now, the main thing with that jewelry was that none of that included rings. So I figured a wedding necklace could be something like a substitute and some sort of homage to me not exactly being a pony. Beside that necklace was another. One had my cutie mark etched into it, and the other had Luna’s. Luna would wear the one with my mark on it if we got married, and I would wear the necklace with her mark etched into it. I stared down at the necklaces, admiring how pristine they both looked in the sunlight.

God I spent so many bits on these things. May they never see the light of day again. I closed the drawer shut after grabbing the bag of bits.

“You know, Ostri, I figured you of all ponies wouldn’t loot historical ruins,” Celestia’s voice came from behind me. From her tone, I could tell she was joking. “Ostri? Are you even going to respond? Emote? Pretend to be scared that I caught you doing something that would be illegal if you literally didn’t own everything in that nightstand?” I let out a deep breath. “By the harmony, I think that you and Luna breaking up has done more to you than I could imagine.”

“Of course it did. We were basically family, Celestia. I may joke about my lack of one, but I genuinely sometimes yearn for one. It was… nice. Then I wake up and boom, alone all over again! Woohoo! Man am I glad I spent the last fucking year of my life on fucking nothing! I took literal arrows for Luna, slaughtered an army for her safety, and then I learned that Luna ‘didn’t love me’ or some shit. I was hoping to marry her in a few years, but some purple shithead…” I sighed. “I shouldn’t get mad at Starlight; she didn’t know she would accidentally drag me into the future with her. I should get mad at anyone. It just sucks, you know?”

“It… Ostri, do you wish to talk about it? I’m sure I can-”

“No. I know what you’re gonna say, and I can probably guess why you’re here. Luna said she was sorry about what she said and wants to give me another shot?”

“Well… Yes. How did you know that?”

“You wouldn’t have sought me out, Celestia. I know you and I ended off on us being friends, but we were never exactly close. I wish we did get closer; I was genuinely enjoying your company up until I disappeared. But uh… yeah, you wouldn’t have sought to comfort me, especially when Luna was probably crying after what I said to her…” I hummed. “You know what, fuck it, take me to wherever Luna is, I’ll… give her a chance.” I wasn’t going to. No. I was going to tell her to stay the flying fuck out of my life. 

Celestia didn’t need to know that though.

“Would you rather fly, or would you like to experience modern magic?”

“As in?”

“Teleportation, it was discovered sometime after you left. I believe Starlight might’ve accidentally kick-started the magical revolution when she showed up.”

“I’d rather fly then. I don’t know how ready I am to see Luna again.”

“We’ll be flying to Canterlot, and I know that Sonic Rainboom took a lot out of your wings. The only pony I know that can do it, without needing to stop for a rest, is Rainbow Dash.”

“...Teleportation wouldn’t be too bad then.” Celestia’s horn lit up and reality blinked around me. The next thing I knew, I was in a throne room. Luna was sitting on the throne, and Twilight and some of her friends were sitting in front of the steps up to it. I looked around for a couple seconds and couldn’t stop myself from grinning. “Man, magic is bullshit, but I have to admit, being able to teleport is cool. It’s a thing humans want to do, and basically never could manage to do due to the lack of magic…” I hummed. “Well, I did something that the rest of humanity can’t do, which is teleport. That’s cool.” I concealed that little giggle with a wing. 

“Ostri,” Luna spread her wings and lept to the air. She gracefully glided down, landing right in front of me with equal grace. “I… I believe I owe you an apology.”

“Cool.”

“Ostri, this is serious. We could… begin dating again.”

“Okay, cool. You weren’t even planning to do that until you saw how borderline suicidal I got after you dumped me. Hell, I’m still considering letting myself starve to death.” I tapped my chin a couple times. “So, Princess, what truly made you think ‘maybe I shouldn’t dump my boyfriend after finding out he’s still alive’? I’m curious. Because yesterday you were all ‘I don’t think we were ever in love’ or some stupid shit.”

“Ostrich! You can’t speak to a Princess like that!” I slowly leaned to the right to give Twilight a ‘really, muthafucka’ look, before standing straight.

“Well… I know I should’ve given you another chance. Golly, even with a thousand years of living-”

“Cool. Luna, I am going to tell you and I’m going to want you to promise me something.” Luna cocked her head to the side. God dammit, Luna-no, your ex being adorable is not a good reason to kiss her ass. “I want you to promise me that you’ll leave me alone. I don’t care about how much time has passed since the end of this conversation. I don’t give a shit if you suddenly love me. I don’t give half a damn if you want to date me ever again. Just leave me alone. I don’t want anything to do with you.”

“But I-”

“Dumped me. You dumped me, Luna. I literally got shot with an arrow for your well being. I’ve slaughter dozens of griffins who wanted your stupid fucking head. Despite that, you dumped me.” I started walking towards the balcony I finally took notice of. “As I said, I am going to go find a new path in life, one that hopefully leads me away from you. If, somehow, you gain my good graces again, cool. You probably won’t though, Luna.” I sighed. “I love you, I still do. God all i wanna do is nuzzle and kiss you like a guy with puppy love, but you… I don’t trust you, Luna.” With that, I hopped off the balcony and started gliding down towards Ponyville.

By the time I landed, my wings were hurting like a bitch, but I knew I had to get Blaze before I did anything. If nothing else, she would at least keep me emotionally stable, and she was probably my best friend. And so far, she’s been the most loyal to me, sticking by my side while facing down a whole army, and literally waited in my room for a thousand years just in case I was somehow still alive. You can’t buy or get that kind of loyalty anywhere else. Of course, by the time I turned around, Blaze was sitting in front of me, tongue panting, looking adorable.

“I… Assume you’re going to tickle me until I stop frowning?” Blaze nodded. “Well, I won’t complain about spending more time with you. You had to be lonely while I was gone, right.” Blaze nodded.

“I thought you died, Ostri. And then when it turns out that you’re still alive… I was so happy. Can I tickle you like old times, and then we can go play fetch? I know that last one feels a bit demeaning to me, but… I liked playing it with you despite that. It felt… nice to have you around, a thousand years ago, to have a friend. I never properly got to tell you this, not without it seeming sarcastic but… I loved you. Not in the romantic way, but I loved you, and I still love you. You are my favorite stallion in the universe, and I would give anything to spend another day with you.”

“You know what, Blaze? You can tickle the shit out of me. We can play fetch…” I couldn’t help but feel a whole lot better now that Blaze had voiced how she felt about me. It was… heartwarming to hear that. To know that I was at least actually cherished by somebody. “Once we get a place to stay first; we need a roof over our head. I know this bag’s got at least a month’s worth of rent and food; my first job paid enough for me to get a house apparently. Then we can play, cuddle, do anything you wanna do. I’ll do it.”

“That would be nice. We can sleep under the stars; I can keep us dry with my shield, and I know you liked using me as a bed.”

“Okay… yeah, I did. You are stupidly soft, which is great because of how much fluff is added when you ball your tails up.”

“It would also save us money until you can get a job. That way we won’t be running on borrowed time; your bits can only last so long if we’re spending twenty a day in a shitty hotel room.”

A flash of purple made Blaze jump, and she immediately tackled me to the ground and started growling at whatever the fuck the purple flash was.

[Theresa]

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Wow. But don't forget to put in Luna getting scolded considering I want to read that bit.

[Heptameron]

glad to hear it, i was kinda dissapointed at how fast he forgave luna