Update #4 · 6:40pm Aug 25th, 2012

EQD responded, and I'm gonna be honest, it wasn't as great a response as I thought it would be. That's totally understandable, since I am a beginner writer. Anyways, here's a copy of most of what was sent.

Specific Issues:
Dialogue tagging mistakes.
Punctuation mistakes, including missing quotation marks.
Use apostrophes for alternative quotes in your story, lest things get confusing for your reader.

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TIllusions
MLP: FiM
Dark
When one walks in the Everfree Forest, they walk with darkness ahead, and paranoia behind.
Twilight
Zecora
OC
8-Bit · 2.7k words · 524 views
EUrbanization
MLP: FiM
Dark
Adventure
Comedy
Spike wakes up to a world where Equestria is filled with cities, and everyone is a criminal!
Spike
Main 6
8-Bit · 3.5k words · 666 views