Not bad

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one of those eh.

Awesome story is awesome.

Hmmm.....I have an odd feeling that this needs expansion.

Seriously, though, it feels like chapter one of a longer story...

How about a second chapter? Celestia and Futa Luna? Hmmm>? Prease?

2413401 That does seem like an interesting addition, hmmm..

2413059 I will have to see what I can come up with..

2413002 Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it!

2412533 I'm not sure what kind of face that is!

Too many faces? Perhaps, perhaps.. but they're all so CUTE! I just want to use them all.

I bet the first guard is Aegis Shield.

Unf.

this was a very entertaining read; a bit rushed and a bit of character building at the beginning would be nice, but other than that fantastic job!

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It was actually originally intended just to be used to make a comic with, but I chose not to draw it. XD The next chapter I'm working on is muuuch better and longer, it's really turning out quite lovely and surpassing this one I think!

2413619 it's damn good for a first fic, but you need to work better on the details. with sex, you do more than just say "He Pounded" you put detail into the feel of it, and the reaction of both participants.

2420306 Thank you very much! I am currently working on a second chapter, and it has far more thought and detail put into it c: So hopefully it will far surpass my very first fic.

2420312 good luck, and i will be watching you

This was fun to picture and well thought out! Oh god i could imagine Luna chain mounting all her guards just to sate this new development xD