Chapter One
Chapter One
Twilight sat at the small table, with her half muffin eaten lying on the table. The recent events had been troubling her. Throughout her entire life, everything could be explained through science (other than Pinkie Pie, but she was an exception), and yet here she was, with something that completely baffled her almighty science.
She glanced up, noticing Pinkie Pie excitedly bouncing in her direction, a huge grin across her face. “Hey there, sadface! What’s gotcha down?” she called.
“What?...Oh, I’m fine, Pinkie.”
“Oh puh-lease! I know when somepony's not happy, silly-filly."
It was apparent to Twilight that there was no way she could get the annoying pink pony to leave her alone. Besides, Pinkie Pie was the only pony that she knew to ever defy science. Perhaps this was her area of expertise.
“Well, I guess there is something...”
“Ooh! A game! Oh boy... um... pineapple!”
“...what? No, no, Pinkie, it’s not a game. You see, I’ve been having this really strange feeling lately, that I can’t explain. It makes me happy, but-- no, it’s better than happiness. I just... I can’t explain it,” sighed Twilight, unable to put her frustration into words.
Pinkie giggled for a moment. “Silly Twilight! You know there’s nothing better than happiness.”
“But it was Pinkie, I promise,” insisted Twilight.
“Fine then. We can settle this with the happiness test!” beamed Pinkie, bouncing rapidly over to the counter, and returning with a cupcake in hoof. “Just eat this cupcake!” she called, shoving it into Twilight’s mouth. “See? Doesn’t that make you happy? Are you telling me it’s better than that feeling?”
Twilight spluttered, trying to respond, her mouth full of cupcake. Spitting out the remains of the sugary treat, she managed to finally speak. “Yes, Pinkie, it’s better than cupcakes. I can’t explain it well, but when I feel it... I just feel... good.”
"But, but....it's a cupcake." She said sadly.
Pinkie sat down for a moment, confused by Twilight’s insistence that there could possibly be something better than cupcakes. After a long silence Pinkie spoke in a serious tone she rarely used.
"Well... there is one thing that’s better than happiness and cupcakes, but...” As Pinkie placed her left hoof on Twilight’s shoulder, seemingly about to say something wise, she suddenly froze. She took off her hoof slowly and then she stared at it for a moment. “ITCHY LEFT HOOF!” she screamed, and suddenly bounced out of the building at top speed.
Twilight shrugged, knowing better than trying to figure out what Pinkie was up to, and walked out of the building, trotting towards the library.
When she arrived, Spike was just waking up. “Good morning, sleepyhead!” she called out to him. He groaned, and rolled over on his side. When he finally got out of bed and went downstairs, he found Twilight checking every nook and cranny. “Say, did you bring the constellation charts home yesterday?” she inquired.
“Uh... no. You had them when you were taking Fluttershy home, remember?”
“...horsefeathers. I must have left them at her cottage; I’ll be back by lunch, okay? Can you fix something for when I get back?”
“Yeah, sure.”
Twilight found herself knocking on the door to Fluttershy’s cottage once again. She had been pondering the recent events involving Fluttershy, and was becoming more and more confused. It seemed almost as if Twilight had been spending more time with Fluttershy, not the other way around.
Her plan of a simple, scientific answer didn’t seem too promising now. Maybe she should talk to Fluttershy about it, but she didn’t want to freak her out with a confession of “Hey, I get a strange feeling everytime I see you. Any idea why?”
“H-Hey, Twilight. You’re back... soon.”
Twilight yelped slightly as she was snapped back to reality. “Oh! Hi, Fluttershy,” she stuttered, feeling at a lost for words. “I think I might have left my... um... my charts! My constellations charts, I think I might have left them here last night,” she managed to spit out.
What is my problem? It’s like I’ve lost my ability to think rationally, she thought.
“I think they’re in my room. I’m sorry--”
“No, no! It’s fine!” Twilight interrupted, not wanting the pegasus to apologize for nothing. “You didn’t do anything wrong. I just need them back.”
“Oh, okay. I’ll go get them-- you can have a seat, if, um, you want to?
“Of course,” responded Twilight, feeling as nervous as Fluttershy usually was.
While Fluttershy fluttered up the stairs to go retrieve the constellation charts, Twilight had a seat. The cottage was nice and quaint, with some lovely paintings strewn across the wall. Normally she would admire the paintings in more detail, but Twilight had something else on her mind. All of these strange feelings and her loss of words earlier had something to do with Fluttershy, that was for certain. ‘But what? What about Fluttershy made her act and think so differently?’ She pondered. It simply didn’t make any sense.
“Here they are,” called Fluttershy as she came back into the room, delicately holding the charts in her mouth.
“Thanks!” responded Twilight with a grin. “I guess I’ll be going now.”
“Um... do you want to stay for lunch?” asked Fluttershy with a blush.
“I can’t. I’m sorry Fluttershy, but I told Spike to make me something already.”
“...oh. I guess I’ll see you later then.” mumbled Fluttershy, looking rather down.
Twilight thought for a minute.“Well... I guess I could stay for a little while and have some tea--”... Twilight had no idea what she was doing-- she needed to get back home to Spike but she just couldn't turn away from Fluttershy. Then she felt it...that warm feeling from earlier had returned. Twilight didn't know why, but there was something she liked about that warm and fuzzy feeling she got when Fluttershy was around.
“Yay!” Fluttershy called, her normally quiet tone lost for a more happy one. “I’ll make something right now! B-Be right back!”
Twilight smiled, switching her place from the couch to the table in the dining room. Fluttershy was a good cook; she was certain to make something good. She leaned back in the seat, and continued to ponder recent events.
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A really nice start in my opinion. Excited for the next chapter.
Greetings
2389978 Hi there! I'm glad you liked it!
Awesome Prologue and first Chapter my friend ^^ I cant wait to read more ^^ Ur story good friend Has a Favorite
More, please more!
Need a noun there, bro. Half eaten what?
Other than that, adorable. Has a favorite and a moustache.
<3 DarqFox
2390689 Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it!
2393096 More will be coming soon enough, I promise!
2393563 Thanks, it should be fixed now. I'm glad you like it!
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Damn I should have supplied some insulin, because this has started adorably well. Love Twishy stories, and this one looks set to be good. Have a fave and a thumbs up from me.
2395360 Thank you!
I feel horrible for not noticing this earlier. I'm supposed to see every TwiShy fic within 10 minutes of their posting time ;-;
Either way, looking forward to the rest of this.
One problem though: Stuttershy. Flutters doesn't actually stutter in the show.
2398399 I'm glad you're looking forward to the rest!
Possibly spoilers below? I mean, if it isn't already obvious, but I don't want to just make assumptions and make anyone mad.
On the "Stuttershy" issue, I can see your point, although you have to remember that she hasn't shown any romantic interest in the show before.
...It's also because I find it hard to convey her quiet and nervous nature :P
Thanks for the advice though! I'll try to keep the stuttering to a minimum (if possible!)
Spoilers above in case you happen to be scrolling up.
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Well of course she hasn't shown any romantic interest in the actual show. I think Faust confirmed at one point that the Mane 6 will never be involved or interested in any other characters romantically.
Stuttering is a very common way for people to try to write a shy character, and actually being a pretty shy person at times, it's probably easier for me than for a lot of people.
Good luck with the rest, though.
2398589 I know. I was just saying that I don't have a basis to go on when writing her in these kind of situations. I appreciate the advice though, and I don't mean to come off as defensive.
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Well, you'll get better the more you write. It also doesn't hurt to read a lot of other people's works, to help inspire you and it might even help you with how to express Fluttershy in situations like this.
2398670 All right. I'm a huge fan of TwiShy pairings, so I'll try to do a lot of reading in order to improve my portrayal of her. Thanks!
Speaking of which, I just read "Love Light, Sleep Tight" and absolutely loved it!
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Glad you enjoyed it! That seems to be the most popular one that I've worked on...
It was good. I highly enjoy TwiShy, so this was nice to see! Sorry for not getting to it sooner!
I have a couple of things I'd like to say, though. Someone's already pointed out the over-dose of stutters, but I find that "Oh" comes out a bit too often from Fluttershy--almost as often as people abuse "darling" from Rarity. Try not to do it as much. Also, it feels like it's rushed. Add more details, and give Twilight more time to come to her senses. Obviously, Fluttershy already has feelings for Twi, and vice versa, though Twilight doesn't know how she feels. Make sure things aren't so abrupt and short. Longer chapters, maybe, and be sure to show, not tell!
Despite all of that, I did enjoy this! I want to see more. Good job so far.
2406951 Thank you! I've taken in your advice and tried my best to work it into later chapters, and will at some point get around to perhaps rewriting the prologue and chapter one as personally I think I can make them much better.
read over it, and you'll see everyone instead of everypony, but otherwise awesome!
Something tells me that itchy left hoof is a sing for "One of you'r friend s are about to fall in love with each otter" or something like that.