The Night is Passing

by Cynewulf

Act 2: Pilgrim's Progress

Act II

Pilgrim’s Progress

or

Darkness Visible

At once as far as Angels kenn he views

The dismal Situation waste and wilde,

A Dungeon horrible, on all sides round

As one great Furnace flam'd, yet from those flames

No light, but rather darkness visible

Serv'd onely to discover sights of woe,

Regions of sorrow, doleful shades, where peace

And rest can never dwell, hope never comes

That comes to all; but torture without end…

...Farewell happy Fields
Where Joy for ever dwells: Hail horrours, hail
Infernal world, and thou profoundest Hell
Receive thy new Possessor: One who brings
A mind not to be chang'd by Place or Time.

The mind is its own place, and in it self
Can make a Heav'n of Hell, a Hell of Heav'n.
~Paradise Lost by John Milton, Book I

Comments

[Willsons]

This chapter disappoints me.

[Cynewulf]

4100074 it's just a divider silly

New chapter is about 16% as of last night

[Willsons]

4100440 Fine then. This divider disappoints me. That is what I get for not looking at the word count.

[Cynewulf]

4098557 I sure hope she is. I do think I have some stuff to make up for Axiom, now that my promise that he was the child of is fulfilled. I loved him, but I think this was best for him. He was better as a Hamlet's Ghost than as Turnus. Also yes I have pleased comradesquirrel and also acquired one of my favorite songs. I'm a sucker for gang vocals.

4102279 Kamina died and the world shook at his passing Dude I love that anime, and I love Kamina.

[Dinoguy1000]

4103031 It's easily one of the best I've seen, right up there with Cowboy Bebop and FLCL and basically anything by Studio Ghibli or Satoshi Kon.

[TheAlmightySage]

Congrats on getting it accepted.

[Cynewulf]

4109925 Thank you! I'm rather pleased. EQD acceptance isn't the huge boon it was when I started, but it's still nice, you know?

[TheAlmightySage]

4109927
True, but recognition from established groups, I think that's the right word, is always a nice thing.

[Seattle_Lite]

I was pleased to have approved yet another of your stories, Cyn. Keep up the excellent work. Cheers.

[Cynewulf]

4118621 and I thank you for it, Seattle. Godspeed!

[Lucasmembrane]

7300187

For a while there I thought you were gonna start shipping Twi with the OC. I'm seriously hoping for no inter-Mane6 shipping.

Nah, pretty sure Twi's heart is already spoken for, whether or not she even realizes it. But re: mane 6 shipping, I'm totally digging the Raridash buildup, and hope that it proceeds apace :)

Overall I'm liking the structure of this so far. The perspective shifts definitely add to the tension and the overall atmosphere. Maybe I'm just misremembering earlier parts (reading slowly because life is stupidly intrusive), but it seems like in calmer times they're more likely to occur at natural breaks, making for a series of almost self-contained vignettes, whereas the crazier things get the more likely we are to jump in the middle of some action, which both heightens tension and gives the reader a feel for how confusing and disorienting this is for the characters themselves.

Anyway. Why the heck am I writing when I could be reading?