It's been a week since the six mares appeared in my house and I can safely say that I have absolutely NOT got used to it. It's almost impossible to get used to having six mares in your house. Especially when one of them always wants to party at all the wrong times. Just yesterday I came downstairs after hearing a loud bang! to discover that not only had Pinkie Pie brought Gummy with her but she had also brought her party cannon. Twilight and Fluttershy are no problem at all. Fluttershy is, well, Fluttershy and Twilight is...kind of...the same. But as for Rarity, Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash...I. Can't. Cope! Rarity is the worst. She always has something bad to say about my things. Rainbow Dash flies about to much. Applejack just sits on the back garden porch with a blade of corn between her teeth and her hat covering her eyes. Ocasionally she'll spot apples on the trees and buck them off but I don't mind that. It's actually kind of helpful. We'll just have to see whether or not I can deal with these mares.
I ducked as another burst of table decorations soared out of the pink ponies cannon.
"PINKIE!" I yelled. But she didn't seem to hear she just hit the cannon again and more decorations flew out. Soon my living room was brightly decorated.
"Great!" She exclaimed. "Now for the outside!" I stopped her just as she reached the front door.
"You can't go out there." I told her.
"Well why not, silly?" She asked. I thought about it for a moment. It was early. Nobody would be awake. Reluctantly I opened the door and move out of the way. Another bang as Pinkie began decorating the outside. I sighed. A week and I still haven't managed to gain control over the mares. I nodded towards Fluttershy, to signal Pinkie was gone, as she slowly poked her head round the corner of her hiding place. As soon as Pinkie had begun firing the party cannon she had hidden behind the couch. Normally I wouldn't pick favourites but Fluttershy and Twilight would be. They never do anything to annoy me. Twilight just reads and studies humans while Fluttershy just looks at pictures of Earth's animals. Although I do think that Equestria is on Earth and is hidden from humans due to the fact that Spike put a globe on his pile of stolen items. The front door opened and Pinkie came in with her party cannon. I didn't want to know how my neighbours would react to it but what the heck! I watched as she walked upstairs with the cannon.
"Ooh!" I heard her exclaim. "I missed a spot!" Boom! The party cannon went off a final time. I smiled. Confound these ponies.
I spent the rest of the day taking down all of the decorations while having to listen to Pinkie Pie's endless pleas for me not to. Rainbow Dash was flying in the back garden which I didn't approve of but nopony listens to me anyway. Applejack would often challenge her to a race in the garden which, luckily enough, is very large. Pinkie continued to plea with me but I didn't listen. I finally took down the final decoration and sat down, exausted. Taking care of six grown mares is not easy. Especially when one of them is Pinkie Pie.
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Authors Notes: Hope you enjoyed this chapter! Tell me what you think I could improve on and what you thought I did well. The next chapter is coming out soon!
You're obviously looking for a slice-of-life feel, but I can't get it from how brief the chapters are in this style. If there were more subtle jokes a short format would be more acceptable (think the Azumanga Daioh manga), but if you continue with just the drama and laughs of life, I think longer chapters with more intense detail are in order.
Can you make the chapters just a bit longer?
Agai and Frizzy are right, it needs to be a little longer. Enjoyed reading though.
Tip: Pinkie MIGHT be more willing to let you take down the decorations if you allow her to use said decorations to throw a party FIRST. She may even help you clean up after the party.
Some tips:
-should be longer chapters
-needs maybe more speech lines
-at some point a montage of you getting these six mares under control
-maybe some akward moments (it's always fun)
-and ~yay~
... You know it is a wonder nobody is complaining about the LOUD BOOMING EXPLOSIONS....
Might want to fix that.