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Uh, she didn't do much anyway, No one will miss her.
nvm she grew a brain again
Okay I know your not going look at this but on the off chance you do I would like to state it's idea and a great story but it just doesn't seem real. Your descriptions are good but some of it just doesn't seem like how they should be. For example when Twilight and Trixie walk in they seem boringly calm finding out that the mayors house is in shambles. Or how they seem sick seeing the body on the wall the way it is when is should easily been horrified. Another thing is how short each "chapter" is, I understand you would like to keep it short but three or four chapters could be one simply by separating them with a line or something, like this "_____________________________________________________________".
Never mind about the 'instead of Celestia I'm going with Trixie' thing, but getting her now is much too late.
This is the start to slaughter horse what a couincident