Derpy wants some cock! Gilda wants some cock!

... Hopefully, Macintosh wants some cock, too.

Commence read.

Well that was a bundle of people confronting Dash for sex. Now Applejack seems alright with the idea of Derpy, but Gilda? Maybe Applejack should get at her first?

What are the others up to?

Oh Dash... You really gotta learn to think before you talk

Beg pardon?

Oh shit.

Rainbow, you're about to have Winona for a roommate.

You describe Dash and AJ making love with such...intensity, so intimately. Then spooge.

So Dinky is Derpy's sister in this? Was Dash even referring to Dinky?
And why am I reminded of Hoof Beats 2?
"Shucks, it was Derpy? That was mighty neighborly of ya!"

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Oh god, I'd totally forgotten about that hoof beats scene

on a different note, Applejinx... we do see AJ and Dash partnered, as well as Flutters and Pinkie... both, even, with foals. But has the subject of marriage come into play? As in, something official? I note how Dash said "marefriend", but it's gone way past that level now...

This chapter worked for me, it made Rainbow Dash more likable. There is some compassion visible, some caring about others, and that helps a great deal. Plus... some restraint and deferment. Also, some gentleness. That works for me.

Incidentally, I hope Twilight and Trixie are still looking after Rarity and helping her have some kind of sex that doesn't involve crippling shame. Heavens knows, looking after Sweetie Belle fulltime is going to stress Rares out...

And are we going to see any fallout from Fluttershy's birth, aka 'Fluttershy's aversion to discomfort and Pinkie's latent feeder tendencies nearly gets Fluttershy and foal killed'? Pinkie snapping and going all personal trainer on Fluttershy would be awesome. "No Sweet Tongue Music 'till I see some pushups, chubby!"

Also, Braeburn needs to come to town so there can be d'aww. And the dawning of ScootaBelle will do interesting things to the CMC. And and and...

God, I love this series.

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That's if Twi and Trixie even *know* about Rarity yet... chances are, that'll be covered here, maybe?

Hopefully, the cover image is accurate, and Twi's going alicorn. Simultaneous wing and horn play! Watch the little purple nerd explode!

OKay. Turned out better than expected. With gilda showing up i was like "ooooh fuck. brace for shitstorm!"
but instead she was needy.. and d'aww, derpy needs lovin'

I did not like Gilda in this chapter. The way she acted and her dialogue just seemed. . . off. The way you connected her behavior now to subtle nuances from her previous appearance was well done, don't get me wrong, but even with that justification she didn't seem entirely real to me. I can't name anything specific, but my advice would be to reread that section outloud and see how it sounds. If possible, I'd advise getting someone to read it with you, much like rehearsing a play, and see how the dialogue works in real life between two people.

I have to agree with Rainbow's hesitance towards Derpy. While it seems to me that Derpy is not "retarded" by the American definition, she definitely doesn't seem to be "all there" in the mental sense. So it makes sense that Dash isn't entirely comfortable with the idea of banging Derpy, and while it seems that she and Applejack are the best ponies to guide the mailmare into the adult world, knowing you it's not going to be as simple as it sounds. The best I can hope for is that Derpy isn't too heartbroken and finds true happiness in the end.

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I gotta admit I'm interested in this, 'cos Gilda's one big 'oh shit!' moment. She's come after Dash for sexin', claiming to be all pony-fan now, but her track record is not good. There's nothing reassuring about her showing up, and Rainbow is a sentimental fool (and far too 'pony') to go along with it, though there's an element of truth to what Gilda says- but that griffin is NOT a pony and is conning herself and acting out her alienated feelings. I'm guessing she had some sort of fight with another griffin or even got kicked out of her village.
To some extent it's 'the premise' but if the idea of 'griffin on two levels, both all cool and badass and also with an emotional side that's kinda childish and petulant and needy' is a problem then Gilda will be a problem. 'Cos she is on two levels, like it or not, and it's almost impossible to hold her in that 'sad pleading pony' mode- the instant she starts to get her way, she's back on top of the world again, manipulating.
I can see how that's a problem for making sense of her, and can try to lampshade it a little when she reappears, for the ponies WILL try to take care of her somehow, especially if she has been exiled (I more than suspect she had- she'd made enemies)

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Nobody ever said Derpy wants sex from specifically Dash did she say that? Did Dash stick around to ask more questions?

Good to see folks interested in what's going on- and if stuff is puzzling or confounding you, by all means say so. There have been times (RWDE) that I even went back and revised things when stuff was taking the wrong tone. I'm not convinced Gilda's coming off wrong 'cos she's a walking conflict and clusterbuck at this point, but she has to seem 'wrong' RIGHT, if you know what I mean

2107254 I can see what you're saying, and I think you accomplished what you set out to with that scene. It's just that to me, the scene read less as "these characters are awkward and therefore this scene is awkward" and more as "I want this scene to be awkward, but the characters aren't quite right." To clarify, it seemed like you were making the characters fit the scene, rather than the scene fit the characters. You see what I'm saying?

2107254 Well, she may not want anything specifically from Dash but that's how Dash sorta interpreted it. Understood from Applejack's dialogue with her that a mare has needs and Derpy is no exception.

Now to just wait and see how things progress with Gilda being involved.

Though by the looks of how some of the story progression, we'll see some of the others before continuing directly on, yes?

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I couldn't resist springing Gilda as the lurking plot device, revealing herself to Dash who just HAPPENED to land on that ledge. Some coincidences are just for throwing the biggest possible monkey wrench into things- I'll try to never have an END scene unfold that way, you gotta have some advance warning for those, but this is just the beginning

PFFFT Dat ending! RD, you're an idiot.
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A horrifying thought occurs to me.

Magic Wang size has been demonstrated to be proportional to maximum lifetime vaginal looseness.

Flutters, who was already huge, just had a difficult birthing with a great lump of a foal.

Please, you HAVE to do something with this!

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oh?
now that you've mentioned it, I MUST know!
but I don't want to know!
call it research?

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I just really want Unfuckable Flutterguy v2.0 and Prissy-Pants Princess Celestia to cross paths. A ponyvag worthy of the Flutterguy's preposterousness!

Either that, or Pinkie getting wind of Celestia's stick-in-the-mudness and going after her.

Holy crap!
Well, back to the usual way of things... I dunno what happened, but I tripped whatever thing (whether it's an algorithm or some dude in charge) that comes and whacks me.
Derpy Desires just went from 'hot list' #100 or so to #4100, 21 pages down, in one update. ONE update.
Looks like we're back to purely word of mouth, folks. Never trust the popular stories list, never trust the feature box. It is not your friend, and you can't earn it by hard work or good spelling. Apparently you can cheat it, because that's what RapeTrainExpress got banned for, but them as just write can't have nice things.
Somethin' funky goin' on. I am going to start writing chapter three today in spite of it.
I will not get all on ya- just, please love me even if this website featuring system won't.

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THIS. Yes this, AppleDash marriage.

With the intense plot you also serve AppleDash clop. The second and third story didn't have nearly enough

2111015 We love you and your writing, no worries on that.

You know, I think I'd say what's most distinctive to me is your dialogue. I can't pin down exactly what about it, but you write in a really unique way that I really like. Just can't figure it out for the life of me.

Wait...

Magic bit + Fluttershy's recent vaginal expansion + Fluttershy's already huge dick = Fluttershy Dick surfing ftw?

Seriously, I can see it now. Fluttershy paddling herself out to sea while using her dick to keep herself afloat...
What the fuck is wrong with me?

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You ain't the only one.

come to bed, dearest.

reeeeseeearccch....

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ASomething I've been wanting to say- you surely have known this since book 3 if not earlier, but this one is utterly opaque, totally inaccessible to anyone who hasn't gone through ALL THREE Jinxieverse books up to this point. Even aside from "apple jack and rainbow Dash have a foal, it seems to be genetically Dashie's, magic dick sex toy wat" there's twixie and stuff too.

However *looks at view ciunt* you seem to have brought in a bunch of readers-- like me-- and those readers are surely enjoying the continuation of a story we've come to love.

Oh and about getting the attention you deserve. I've ancient Heart is holding strong as my most ignored, written what I thought would be featured box fodder that got all but completely ignored, and I'm satisfied with just the few dozen who actually seek me out (amazingly enough!), and the few hundred who spare me a glance. And I'm the Rainbow Dash here! MMDW what now?

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The Ancient Heart's First Beating is one of the two Tactical stories I've been shouting out on my FIM homepage since I last revised it. Go and see if you don't believe me

I'm guessing it's gonna be mighty challenging to let newcomers jump randomly in- but I began reading Terry Pratchett with 'Jingo'. Even with ordinary MLP stories there's the 'what is a pegasus, what is an Element of Harmony' stuff: this is why characters drop out of sight at times (like Lyra during RWDE). I do what I can.

So THAT'S why I have this tiny trickle of people discovering Assault Unit!

I'm much honored to have two of my little fun things on your page. Thanks for that.

Didn't finish yet, but

>correlation between looseness and dick size

This was nice change with more of that AppleDash fluff we all miss.

And its nice that they're gonna include Derpy. About time everyone's favorite misunderstood ditz got attention.

As long as... Oh wait, Dashie ruined it. Again.

Way to drop that last bit of news on AJ, Dashie. My word, things have escalated again. Derpy and Gilda both want a lay. So incredibly unpredictable right off the bat. I can't wait to be reading more of this story in the morning.