2315026 If you've been paying attention, though, you'll notice that they wouldn't even know what sex was. They might have understood romance, and even attraction, since Celestia had finally come to understand masturbation, but they wouldn't know the actual 'doing it' part.
That's all the information I'll give for now, you'll have to wait for the next chapter to find out the rest! (Hopefully it doesn't take an entire month to write this time).
You know, I never really understood the fascination with twins. I mean, yeah, it's two females who are identical (which is awesome), but...you know...sisters, so you got that weird incesty feeling that follows you for the rest of your life.
Beyond that, there isn't a single flaw in this story that I can see. Very descriptive and well thought-out. I can really see the care you've put into creating this new universe, so...yeah. Great stuff!
The human mind registers symmetry as a sign of health and ability, and any kind of symmetry acts as a sort of trick, giving us a positive reaction towards anything with symmetrical traits, or even two different symmetrical things.
Sure, they'd be an anatomically correct depiction of my vision for anthro ponies, but I actually had something between el-loko and slugbox (without the ridiculous frilly outfits) in mind when I imagined them.
Part of the fun of reading a story is interpreting things your way, though, so don't let me stop you!
I'll admit, I focus on Rarity to an unrealistically high degree, when each them should have equal time.
This was a conscious decision.
I didn't feel secure in my ability to characterize each of the mane six well, so I singled out Rarity, who is my favorite pony, and just focused on fleshing out her character the best of all. I really like exploring the dynamic between Rarity and Twilight, so sometimes Twilight gets more characterization as well.
With the next chapters I've been slowly cobbling together, I've been trying to get more of the mane six in, and hopefully by the end I'll have everything worked out. How it's actually turning out is that Rarity sort of takes turns getting to know each of the mane six more intimately, meaning there is a chapter or two devoted to Rarity and her interactions with one of the other friends.
I think I'm going to keep Rarity as the central character, just to maintain consistency and to make it easier on myself, but there will certainly be more of the others later on.
2444127 (Ha ha, sorry I'm a noob for not understanding how to do the name instead of the number)
Wait, so, I'm not misinterpreting the fact that Rarity's role in this story is the main character? Phew! I thought I was being a bit stupid there! Or wait... *Brain fart*
Wait, so Rarity isn't exactly the main character is she? (I thought about this after a little thinking about my previous comment) Does that mean I'm correct at the fact that you are trying to get all of the mane six equally varied? Or is it the fact that you are trying to make Rarity the main character?...
Yeah, my initial comment there is kind of open to interpretation.
I guess what I'm trying to say is that this was originally intended to be a complete mane six fic, but I ended up focusing on Rarity to make it easier on myself, however I still end up writing a bit for the other characters sometimes.
I honestly wanted the buildup to feel more realistic. Previous comments have led me to believe that I had succeeded, and I'd like to know your thoughts.
Geh If you feel like stopping this story that's fine. But I would love to know if you plan on finishing it, or if you're done. The suspense is killing me! Anyway, I love this story, this is my second favorte clop fic off all time, and I check this once a week at least for updates.
YAY! UPDATE!
Commence read.
EDIT: I see a 4 way coming soon.
2314935 Awww, is it that obvious?
2315019 Well twins like that don't mind sharing despite the family closeness.
2315026 If you've been paying attention, though, you'll notice that they wouldn't even know what sex was. They might have understood romance, and even attraction, since Celestia had finally come to understand masturbation, but they wouldn't know the actual 'doing it' part.
That's all the information I'll give for now, you'll have to wait for the next chapter to find out the rest! (Hopefully it doesn't take an entire month to write this time).
Commence read.
A date has been thrown out there.
Thought Twilight's ramble in being in charge of an experiment was funny.
Then twins...
ah, twins.
Kinda jealous.
Ohhhh the torture of having to wait for the next installment. You evil evil artist * smirks*
"What if, what if I wanted to settle down with all of them?" -- If this is hinting at the conclusion .... I MOST DEFINITELY APPROVE!
Also, Twins. You do know how to get your readers drooling for the next chapter my good sir!
Yes.
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This story was pretty good at first, then I see the word twins...
Well, let's just say that there are no complaints what so ever! None at all.
You know, I never really understood the fascination with twins. I mean, yeah, it's two females who are identical (which is awesome), but...you know...sisters, so you got that weird incesty feeling that follows you for the rest of your life.
Beyond that, there isn't a single flaw in this story that I can see. Very descriptive and well thought-out. I can really see the care you've put into creating this new universe, so...yeah. Great stuff!
2326096 The answer is symmetry.
The human mind registers symmetry as a sign of health and ability, and any kind of symmetry acts as a sort of trick, giving us a positive reaction towards anything with symmetrical traits, or even two different symmetrical things.
Therefore, twins are scientifically sexy.
Loving the story so far, good work! I think clip is a whole lot better with plot!
Ahhhhh I need updates!
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Sure, they'd be an anatomically correct depiction of my vision for anthro ponies, but I actually had something between el-loko and slugbox (without the ridiculous frilly outfits) in mind when I imagined them.
Part of the fun of reading a story is interpreting things your way, though, so don't let me stop you!
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I'll admit, I focus on Rarity to an unrealistically high degree, when each them should have equal time.
This was a conscious decision.
I didn't feel secure in my ability to characterize each of the mane six well, so I singled out Rarity, who is my favorite pony, and just focused on fleshing out her character the best of all. I really like exploring the dynamic between Rarity and Twilight, so sometimes Twilight gets more characterization as well.
With the next chapters I've been slowly cobbling together, I've been trying to get more of the mane six in, and hopefully by the end I'll have everything worked out. How it's actually turning out is that Rarity sort of takes turns getting to know each of the mane six more intimately, meaning there is a chapter or two devoted to Rarity and her interactions with one of the other friends.
I think I'm going to keep Rarity as the central character, just to maintain consistency and to make it easier on myself, but there will certainly be more of the others later on.
2444127
(Ha ha, sorry I'm a noob for not understanding how to do the name instead of the number)
Wait, so, I'm not misinterpreting the fact that Rarity's role in this story is the main character? Phew! I thought I was being a bit stupid there! Or wait... *Brain fart*
Wait, so Rarity isn't exactly the main character is she? (I thought about this after a little thinking about my previous comment) Does that mean I'm correct at the fact that you are trying to get all of the mane six equally varied? Or is it the fact that you are trying to make Rarity the main character?...
I'm slightly confused about this...
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Yeah, my initial comment there is kind of open to interpretation.
I guess what I'm trying to say is that this was originally intended to be a complete mane six fic, but I ended up focusing on Rarity to make it easier on myself, however I still end up writing a bit for the other characters sometimes.
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Eh, fair enough. Just continue to make us (your fans) proud upon your work!
As long as you got dem stories finished.
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Is that a critique or a compliment?
I honestly wanted the buildup to feel more realistic. Previous comments have led me to believe that I had succeeded, and I'd like to know your thoughts.
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Do you mean that, as in there's a hidden community of people who really want more of this?
Or are you just trying to flatter me?
(Yes, I said I'd get the next chapter up in "the next couple of days", and I'm a lying bastard, but It Will Be Here Soon™)
THIS FANFIC IS AMAZING! I just have one question. Why is this fic on Hiatus?
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Because I'm a lazy bastard who thinks preparing for school and "The Real World" is more important than writing anthro lesbian pony porn.
2807591 Yes, but you can't leave us on a cliffhanger, you son of a Diamond Dog!
Geh
If you feel like stopping this story that's fine.
But I would love to know if you plan on finishing it, or if you're done.
The suspense is killing me!
Anyway, I love this story, this is my second favorte clop fic off all time, and I check this once a week at least for updates.
Gaaaaah!!! Why!? Why stop like that!? I was so looking forward to the whole guard mare thing, and you decide to stop right before it! GAAAAAHH!!!
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I sense you were channeling Twilight. Even if you weren't, if they don't mind, who are we to complain?