Amazing! This chapter was really good, Especially with AJ's slight transcend into MI for a second there. The way you write is refreshing, is it because english is not your first language? The flow of words and actions is really good, I quite like it! It lets me see how others who have learned the language perceive it! I have a question, do you take OC's into your stories from other people? Unless you have all the characters plan out, that is.
3310840 Well I don't really know. Didn't even realize the way I write is so much different from other people. Anyway, so far I came up with all the original characters appearing in my books myself. My concept for MI2 is very solid and we are soon done with this book, but MI3 is still very open. Although I already know where I want to go and how I want to conclude this entire series, I yet have to actually develop the storyline for the final instalment.
3310962 Ah I see. Well when you began on MI3, if you need any characters I was wondering if QuietBrush could be in it, depending on how MI3 is formed. I look forward for the next chapter!
3314050 Hm..well I haven't quite fully flesh out her character quite yet, But in her story She is a pegasus Artist, living with a Unicorn mare named Marine Grey. She gets bullied by another pony named Sketchette who goes as far as claiming that QB's artwork is her own, belittling her and go as far as beating her up in public. QB however wants to be friends, despite the protesting of MG believing that she is still a good pony.. She ends up accidentally killing the mare in self defense, She then ends up mixing the pony blood with her red paint and creating paintings called "" Which sells for quite more than she regularly gets paid for her work. Throughout the course of the story Marine Grey finds out about it the murders, the effect of mixing blood with red paint and uses it to her advantage, bringing ponies who have hurt her even the slightest and trigger Quiet's anxiety attacks which she ends up killing the victim. Marine Grey knows that due to her magical and physical strength, Quiet Brush will always be the victim to her.
So in short QuietBrush is a artistic pegasus, with severe anxiety issues and teeters of the brink of losing her mind. I know some people would think it's overused, But I as I said she's still being worked on.
Actually, I quite like that concept. It is clearly grimdark, but original, which is great. Just the names sound a bit strange to me, but thats just my opinion. Well if you already write stories about her, I can harldy implant her in the MI universe as well. But as from my end, I'd say keep developing. This is good material.
3314935 Not my taste of story, but I think it may just have potential for others to enjoy. From your description: That pony may just work with creating ruins in MI with blood.
3315998 3104988 Thank you two for the comments! Yeah it was a story concept I came up with, I may just keep developing it. I could see her writing runes! On the latest chapter, I wonder how Applejack will turn out, She's the only apple left..But I feel her spiral to insanity will have a bigger role? It's just the feeling I'm getting. Also the little filly that Lady Truesight saved, Ive been meaning to ask for a while, does she have any further role?
“Well… Ah never really told anypony about mah biggest dream before. But, actually, Ah always wanted to…”
To what? To what?! *end of chapter* Aww son of a gun! Darn you cliffhangers! I'm glad Applejack is still alive, but sad that she's still under the influence of Maledictum Insania. Please live, Applejack...you have to carry on.
Good lord the feels!....come on apple jack suicide is pointless at least grab a weapon and try to take a few of the cult down with you. Wonder how they are going to deal with despair not like consuming her works. She can teleport so most any cage won't work. Should be a fun read
3318988 I been thinking about the different outcomes for AJ, for a little while now. - Either she commits suicide, to prevent the demon from finishing her. - She attempts to fulfill her dream and take as many cults down with her. Win or lose... - This could be possibility. She becomes a lonely apprentice reaper under Shy. With a lust for vengeance, regardless of her safety. (Hmmm... hey Nero. Would her missing limbs grow back as a reaper? )
I didn't get any notifications that I got a reply to a post here strangely...
3319909 The reaper curse makes mortal ponies into effective killing machines and everything that hinders them from doing their task is either removed or regained. So it sounds likely that she would regrow her missing leg, but the cost of that would be immortality, having to kill many innocent ponies and actively fighting demons every single day.
3320075 If AJ would to turn into a reaper, It'd be interesting if her appearances changes, not just her eyes. I wonder what her special ability would be. I must ask this, If you ever need any characters like demons or reapers, do you accept characters if you could make use of them? Unless you have everything set out. I can't wait for the next chapter! I'm working on my own story, Unfortunately it's not MLP so I cannot post it here! I'll make sure to add you on Deviant art as well!
3330009 Well once cursed by the reaper curse, the changes come in stages and slowly, based on the quantity of consumed demons. First, its like with Derpy: You just look normal, nothing indicates you are a reaper. Second stage, like Fluttershy: Eyes turned black Third stage, like Lady Truesight: Horn/Wings corrupt Final stage, like Crystal Blossom (or Obsidian Shards was): Growing last missing piece (demon wings or demon horn), thus turning them into elder reapers.
You also dont suddenly gain unique abilities. You still have the same you always had, only that the abilities of a reaper were added.
So far, I was only asked for OCs to have cameo appearances in the MI series, which so far did not happen. I thought up most unique characters myself. Well, as already explained, MI2 is planned out. But MI3 is still in early stages of development with many possible events and character encounters yet to be added. If you have interesting, suiting suggestions, I will listen to them surely. If I run into issues, I may come back to your offer.
Why do I suspect that Twilight is going to find her parents at church when she gets to Canterlot?
I'm really glad I stuck with this story. Mystery and sleuth are my least favorite genres, but you left just enough suspension in the chapters that I had to keep going though it. I'm very interested to see where everything is going.
Amazing! This chapter was really good, Especially with AJ's slight transcend into MI for a second there. The way you write is refreshing, is it because english is not your first language? The flow of words and actions is really good, I quite like it! It lets me see how others who have learned the language perceive it! I have a question, do you take OC's into your stories from other people? Unless you have all the characters plan out, that is.
3310840
Well I don't really know.
Didn't even realize the way I write is so much different from other people.
Anyway, so far I came up with all the original characters appearing in my books myself.
My concept for MI2 is very solid and we are soon done with this book, but MI3 is still very open.
Although I already know where I want to go and how I want to conclude this entire series, I yet have to actually develop the storyline for the final instalment.
"...Ah really wanted to..."
If she says 'Grow oranges' I might have to shoot her. ^_^
3310962
Ah I see. Well when you began on MI3, if you need any characters I was wondering if QuietBrush could be in it, depending on how MI3 is formed. I look forward for the next chapter!
3311682
Can you tell me more about this character?
Looks like I mostly predicted that they would go to the hospital.
*prepares to load scythes* Time to wreck some evil cults.
I guess "this is" their core base right...
3314050
Hm..well I haven't quite fully flesh out her character quite yet, But in her story She is a pegasus Artist, living with a Unicorn mare named Marine Grey. She gets bullied by another pony named Sketchette who goes as far as claiming that QB's artwork is her own, belittling her and go as far as beating her up in public. QB however wants to be friends, despite the protesting of MG believing that she is still a good pony.. She ends up accidentally killing the mare in self defense, She then ends up mixing the pony blood with her red paint and creating paintings called "" Which sells for quite more than she regularly gets paid for her work.
Throughout the course of the story Marine Grey finds out about it the murders, the effect of mixing blood with red paint and uses it to her advantage, bringing ponies who have hurt her even the slightest and trigger Quiet's anxiety attacks which she ends up killing the victim. Marine Grey knows that due to her magical and physical strength, Quiet Brush will always be the victim to her.
So in short QuietBrush is a artistic pegasus, with severe anxiety issues and teeters of the brink of losing her mind. I know some people would think it's overused, But I as I said she's still being worked on.
3314935
Actually, I quite like that concept.
It is clearly grimdark, but original, which is great.
Just the names sound a bit strange to me, but thats just my opinion.
Well if you already write stories about her, I can harldy implant her in the MI universe as well.
But as from my end, I'd say keep developing. This is good material.
3314935
Not my taste of story, but I think it may just have potential for others to enjoy. From your description: That pony may just work with creating ruins in MI with blood.
3315998
3104988
Thank you two for the comments! Yeah it was a story concept I came up with, I may just keep developing it. I could see her writing runes! On the latest chapter, I wonder how Applejack will turn out, She's the only apple left..But I feel her spiral to insanity will have a bigger role? It's just the feeling I'm getting.
Also the little filly that Lady Truesight saved, Ive been meaning to ask for a while, does she have any further role?
To what? To what?!
*end of chapter*
Aww son of a gun! Darn you cliffhangers!
I'm glad Applejack is still alive, but sad that she's still under the influence of Maledictum Insania. Please live, Applejack...you have to carry on.
3316970
Yes. Truesight and Amber will reappear soon and they will both be of significance in MI3
Good lord the feels!....come on apple jack suicide is pointless at least grab a weapon and try to take a few of the cult down with you. Wonder how they are going to deal with despair not like consuming her works. She can teleport so most any cage won't work. Should be a fun read
3318988
I been thinking about the different outcomes for AJ, for a little while now.
- Either she commits suicide, to prevent the demon from finishing her.
- She attempts to fulfill her dream and take as many cults down with her. Win or lose...
- This could be possibility. She becomes a lonely apprentice reaper under Shy. With a lust for vengeance, regardless of her safety. (Hmmm... hey Nero. Would her missing limbs grow back as a reaper? )
I didn't get any notifications that I got a reply to a post here strangely...
3319909
The reaper curse makes mortal ponies into effective killing machines and everything that hinders them from doing their task is either removed or regained.
So it sounds likely that she would regrow her missing leg, but the cost of that would be immortality, having to kill many innocent ponies and actively fighting demons every single day.
3320075
If AJ would to turn into a reaper, It'd be interesting if her appearances changes, not just her eyes. I wonder what her special ability would be. I must ask this, If you ever need any characters like demons or reapers, do you accept characters if you could make use of them? Unless you have everything set out. I can't wait for the next chapter!
I'm working on my own story, Unfortunately it's not MLP so I cannot post it here! I'll make sure to add you on Deviant art as well!
3330009
Well once cursed by the reaper curse, the changes come in stages and slowly, based on the quantity of consumed demons.
First, its like with Derpy: You just look normal, nothing indicates you are a reaper.
Second stage, like Fluttershy: Eyes turned black
Third stage, like Lady Truesight: Horn/Wings corrupt
Final stage, like Crystal Blossom (or Obsidian Shards was): Growing last missing piece (demon wings or demon horn), thus turning them into elder reapers.
You also dont suddenly gain unique abilities. You still have the same you always had, only that the abilities of a reaper were added.
So far, I was only asked for OCs to have cameo appearances in the MI series, which so far did not happen. I thought up most unique characters myself.
Well, as already explained, MI2 is planned out.
But MI3 is still in early stages of development with many possible events and character encounters yet to be added.
If you have interesting, suiting suggestions, I will listen to them surely.
If I run into issues, I may come back to your offer.
3405573
So glad to see one of my old fans back on board.
Enjoy the story, friend.
Hope to see a few comments from you.
Why do I suspect that Twilight is going to find her parents at church when she gets to Canterlot?
I'm really glad I stuck with this story. Mystery and sleuth are my least favorite genres, but you left just enough suspension in the chapters that I had to keep going though it. I'm very interested to see where everything is going.