Cliffhanger... we meet again. This story has been a great ride so far with twist and turns, it's not just a "Clop Fic" it's much more and I can't wait for an update.
Edmund goes from lawyer and. Gentleman to Earl of Trottingham. A war is brewing on both worlds.
As for withstanding Celestia's literal heat: he needs this and SCBA equipment: fire proximity suit. Withstand ambient temperatures of 1500 degrees F, direct flame of 2000 degrees F and radiant heat of 3000 degrees F.
Wait, if he is a Earl, does that mean that he owns Trotinham now? Did making earl mean that he owns part of Equestria territory?
And also, because he is the father of the royals those that means that besides have a world in the royals decisions, he can, be invite to any hight parties that involve the whole royal family? I know, Celestia is not his wife but I think it will be a nice gesture, to have some family pictures, one with him his wifes and Celestia, one with him and all his sons, and one with each of his respective wifes and sons. Oh and one with all the family reunited. A memory to remember.
Also, did you will mention the mayor foal at some point next? I think it will be a nice gesture if he has some picture with her and his other son and/or daughter
As much as I like the story, the latest chapter portrayed Edmund as a gigantic Gary Stu - so many boons given to him, and he didn't even have to lift a finger (except the middle lower one ). Somewhat off-putting. For example, I don't believe giving him a title of Earl of Trottingham didn't make any problems. I mean, "hey you, mr./mrs. pony, that human is an earl of your town now. Are you all right with that, huh?" (Depends on what are Ed's capabilites/privileges/powers at this moment, Celestia's speech didn't tell me enough information). It ought to raise at least a few eyebrows.
Also, the mention of a war was... strangely executed. 'Oh hai, here's sum war in the background, Richard's flyin there, doesn't matter, all's peaceful in Equestria, nobody gives a flying fuck (until the last sentence in this chapter, anyway).'
I personally believe the story could be better by fixing those problems.
2688999 Well, I see her heat as being like a really hot day - like 30 celsius plus. Her power incontenance when giving birth would raise the room to those temeratures however. A shame that Equestria doesn't have any of that equipment eh?
2690111 I have to agree with you, I think I've veered into gary stu territory here. But is Ed as perfect and flawless as he seems?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Discord.png I know it seems strange, but historically a woman of low birth who was found to be carrying a royal bastard was often given a title to lessen the scandal. I just switched it around here. And yes, it will raise some eyebrows, but you'll see how it all pans out.
The next chapter will be almost entirely focussed on war, as it grows to effect the people at home. Even for the people of Equestria it will no longer be "that Human war".
I thank you for sticking with me, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter.
"Wait, if he is a Earl, does that mean that he owns Trotinham now? Did making earl mean that he owns part of Equestria territory?"
No, like most titles these days, it is an honouriffic. All Edmund owns is his cottage and half acre property.
Not really, he does of course have a place in various assemblies, and as father to royalty he is indeed invited to royal functions. And yes, Edmund will have photos with all his children.
Cliffhanger... we meet again. This story has been a great ride so far with twist and turns, it's not just a "Clop Fic" it's much more and I can't wait for an update.
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Thanks!
Well, that escalated quickly.
Edmund goes from lawyer and. Gentleman to Earl of Trottingham. A war is brewing on both worlds.
As for withstanding Celestia's literal heat: he needs this and SCBA equipment: fire proximity suit. Withstand ambient temperatures of 1500 degrees F, direct flame of 2000 degrees F and radiant heat of 3000 degrees F.
Wait, if he is a Earl, does that mean that he owns Trotinham now? Did making earl mean that he owns part of Equestria territory?
And also, because he is the father of the royals those that means that besides have a world in the royals decisions, he can, be invite to any hight parties that involve the whole royal family? I know, Celestia is not his wife but I think it will be a nice gesture, to have some family pictures, one with him his wifes and Celestia, one with him and all his sons, and one with each of his respective wifes and sons. Oh and one with all the family reunited. A memory to remember.
Also, did you will mention the mayor foal at some point next? I think it will be a nice gesture if he has some picture with her and his other son and/or daughter
Yay, a new chapter! I waited soooo long
However...
As much as I like the story, the latest chapter portrayed Edmund as a gigantic Gary Stu - so many boons given to him, and he didn't even have to lift a finger (except the middle lower one ). Somewhat off-putting. For example, I don't believe giving him a title of Earl of Trottingham didn't make any problems. I mean, "hey you, mr./mrs. pony, that human is an earl of your town now. Are you all right with that, huh?" (Depends on what are Ed's capabilites/privileges/powers at this moment, Celestia's speech didn't tell me enough information). It ought to raise at least a few eyebrows.
Also, the mention of a war was... strangely executed. 'Oh hai, here's sum war in the background, Richard's flyin there, doesn't matter, all's peaceful in Equestria, nobody gives a flying fuck (until the last sentence in this chapter, anyway).'
I personally believe the story could be better by fixing those problems.
Can't wait for the next chapter
2688999
Well, I see her heat as being like a really hot day - like 30 celsius plus. Her power incontenance when giving birth would raise the room to those temeratures however. A shame that Equestria doesn't have any of that equipment eh?
2690111
I have to agree with you, I think I've veered into gary stu territory here. But is Ed as perfect and flawless as he seems?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Discord.png I know it seems strange, but historically a woman of low birth who was found to be carrying a royal bastard was often given a title to lessen the scandal. I just switched it around here. And yes, it will raise some eyebrows, but you'll see how it all pans out.
The next chapter will be almost entirely focussed on war, as it grows to effect the people at home. Even for the people of Equestria it will no longer be "that Human war".
I thank you for sticking with me, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter.
2689667
"Wait, if he is a Earl, does that mean that he owns Trotinham now? Did making earl mean that he owns part of Equestria territory?"
No, like most titles these days, it is an honouriffic. All Edmund owns is his cottage and half acre property.
Not really, he does of course have a place in various assemblies, and as father to royalty he is indeed invited to royal functions. And yes, Edmund will have photos with all his children.
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I see, what with will know what happen with the mayor and if she had a healty labor, no to mention if she had a boy or a girl
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