I know the picture is wrong, I will fix it a ASAP

(Joke) Alt. Title: DJ Got Us Reading Her Clop Again

The broken English! It burns!

awesome work I love Pinkie like this

1949729 Is it really that bad?

Is anyone interested in a sequel? Well too bad, I'm already writing it so prepare your bodies. I have a proofreader now so you hopefully won't have anything to complain about now 1949729

This is Kalash93 from Authors Helping Authors. I am about to read this story and I will post a review when I am finished.

This is Kalash93 of Authors Helping Authors writing a review for your story.

Story: The Tunes of Romance

Grammar: 3

Pros
1. The story was fun.
2. It is rare to see clop told from the female point of view.
3, You were realistic enough with the sex.

Cons
1. Premature insertion is not okay.
2. The clop was over too quickly.
2. I want a followup piece.

Notes
Congratulations on writing a story what was genuinely fun to read. It wasn't funny, but it was entertaining without ever feeling heavy or serious. I also have to give you props for daring to write a sex scene from the perspective of a female. That's actually a good idea but it is seldom utilized; do more like that. The sex was realistic to a degree. The anatomy and such was all done well enough A few acceptable breaks from reality were granted, although one was definitely too painful to ignore. Inserting into a girl when she isn't ready is painful for both of you.Charging ahead like Pinkie Pie did would almost certainly get that person physically kicked out of bed, if they weren't profusely apologizing and clutching their dick in pain. The sex was over somewhat too quickly, although I can let that slide due to this being an experimental piece. Lastly, you are promising more to come. I want to read what happens next.

You win 3/5 flutteryays.

Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story, Welcome to the Brothel: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/88520/welcome-to-the-brothel The description of what sex feels like for a male is realistic.

2300557 whoa, whoa wait a minute. What is this sudden urge ro review all I got? Don't gwt me wrong, I appreciate that you're taking an interest, but I got a lot of stuff going on right now and doing multiple reply reviews is a bit too much right now.

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That's the fastest response I've ever gotten to a review!

You write a lot of clop and I wanted to see more of your writing as well as offer you advice on how to improve. You have at least a bit of writing talent, so I think that I should try to help you develop it.

You wrote where alot instead of were. Fix please.