The concept and plot are nice, but just about everyone except Rainbow Dash and Rarity feel OOC. I just can't picture Celestia making laws criminalizing homosexuality and forcing everyone to conform to such narrow-minded bigotry. The amount of swearing is also a bit of a turn off, in the future you may consider tuning the curse words down.
I'll be sure to look at both of those owo. The only one that I can agree on without really reviewing the content is Pinkie Pie. I kind of did this because I wanted to keep the whole 3 vs 3 thing, but then I was talking with CDFPurple regarding the plot, and I changed her to a more in-character position in the story. I'll review the story and see if anything else feels OOC. I'll try to turn down the swearing, especially when it's unneccesary. For a lot of scenes, some might be neccesary, but I'll be wary of it :). Thanks for your comments!
The concept and plot are nice, but just about everyone except Rainbow Dash and Rarity feel OOC. I just can't picture Celestia making laws criminalizing homosexuality and forcing everyone to conform to such narrow-minded bigotry. The amount of swearing is also a bit of a turn off, in the future you may consider tuning the curse words down.
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I'll be sure to look at both of those owo. The only one that I can agree on without really reviewing the content is Pinkie Pie. I kind of did this because I wanted to keep the whole 3 vs 3 thing, but then I was talking with CDFPurple regarding the plot, and I changed her to a more in-character position in the story. I'll review the story and see if anything else feels OOC. I'll try to turn down the swearing, especially when it's unneccesary. For a lot of scenes, some might be neccesary, but I'll be wary of it :). Thanks for your comments!
So... Luna has a cauwk?
( that, is another Kuledud3 reference)