2127080 Thanks for the feedback. The program I was using auto indented but I guess didn't transfer over when I loaded it up. I'll be fixing that. I agree that I need to work on my punctuation.
Sweet Celestia, for a second I thought that thou would'st have set Vinyl to be Rarity's sister (both being a white-coated unicorn and all), though We are glad to see that it isn't true.
((In other words, I had a near panic attack thinking Vinyl would be related to Rarity.))
Ok the grammer is ALOT better in this chapter but it still could be improved. And again the story is awesome but i have a petpieve for bad grammer... Sorry
2127080 Thanks for the feedback. The program I was using auto indented but I guess didn't transfer over when I loaded it up. I'll be fixing that. I agree that I need to work on my punctuation.
Sweet Celestia, for a second I thought that thou would'st have set Vinyl to be Rarity's sister (both being a white-coated unicorn and all), though We are glad to see that it isn't true.
((In other words, I had a near panic attack thinking Vinyl would be related to Rarity.))
Ok the grammer is ALOT better in this chapter but it still could be improved. And again the story is awesome but i have a petpieve for bad grammer... Sorry