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You really should indent and/or double-space between paragraphs and new lines of dialogue. The current formatting is very wall-o'-text-ish and difficult to read.
Also, I'd strongly recommend reading up on dialogue conventions. Your punctuation and capitalization are consistently incorrect.
2127080 Thanks for the feedback. The program I was using auto indented but I guess didn't transfer over when I loaded it up. I'll be fixing that. I agree that I need to work on my punctuation.
Just out of curiostiy, what does a symbol for a major chord look like? I didn't know they made something for that.
Sweet Celestia, for a second I thought that thou would'st have set Vinyl to be Rarity's sister (both being a white-coated unicorn and all), though We are glad to see that it isn't true.
((In other words, I had a near panic attack thinking Vinyl would be related to Rarity.))
sober Octavia can sure move pretty quick as well. sure it was right though, making her skip on the meal? earth ponies gotta work harder at the cooking
except pinkie. she's just, pinkie
still wondering where you'll be going with your story. definitely noticed an improvement of quality in this chapter. now we just need Octavia's parents to drop by unannounced while both mares are in the middle of some bedroom diversion. probably too soon for that though.
that's some heavy stuff. I've never taken drugs other than caffeene or prescribed meds before, but I've had my share of encounters with those who create problems that they can control, even if no problem exists. I got a number of questions on where you'll take this story next, but I'll wait for the answers in later chapters.
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Vinyl's addiction is actually based on mine that I've struggled with. Namely the problems of rejection and creating problems to feel like I have some sort of control. I just poorly wrote it out for Vinyl but I'm glad your enjoying it so far.
I cried a deal when Vinyl opened up to Tavi because i can really connect to her. I have pretty bad problems with rejection and feeling alone, not loved. And ive been smoking alot because of it, but nothing like snorting anything or the sort. But i feel like this Vinyl and i have alot in common, and i just hope that i will have someone as loving and accepting as Tavi is to Vinyl. Im really hoping i find that.
thank you for writing this ^-^
I am faving this after the first chapter. It's a rare occasion. You've earned it.
Really looking forward to reading more of this fic. I am intrigued and I like your style.
2766802 Thanks! I've read many of your stories so saying you like actually means a lot to me. I'm planning on continuing this even though I haven't posted a chapter in months. It's loosely based on my own experiences (I just write what I know) and the drug problem is hard to put into words. I also had a Muay Thai tournament recently which I was busy training for. But excuses excuses blah blah blah.
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That's the way I write. That's why your story is turning out to be good.
What happened to the latest chapter? And yes, please do keep going, this is so good.
2775491 I posted it then felt like I rushed the end of it so I'm flushing it out a little bit and should be back up soon.
2782557 Well thank you I'm glad you enjoy it. I'm working on the next chapter currently and should hopefully be out within a week.
upon actually reading this, i humbly agree this needs more views!!
I love Vinyl x Octavia so much.. and poor Tavi she seem so hurt by Vinyl just looking at another mare. I hope nothing too bad get in between the two.
2826316 Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy it so far and the next chapter will be out soon I just need to give it on final go over. And no promises about nothing bad happening.
2828175 I know sonething bands going to happen I'm just hoping not too bad :(
2828224 What I will tell you is Tavi/Scratch is my favorite couple so anything bad will be mended over in good. I'm actually planning on ending Cello and Wubs soon and starting up the second part of their story.
2829690 awe okay and as you can tell tavi x scratch is my favorite couple as well
2829857 I think thats pretty obvious lol.
2829912 really? What gave it away lol xD
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Well then:
I LOVE THIS STORY, KEEP GOING
2848530 Thank you! I felt a little iffy about the last chapter because it dealt more with drugs and I know most bronies haven't really done serious drugs or had any addictions. Glad you liked it.
What can I say?
I really like the setting of the story, with Octavia helping Vinyl with her drugs and all that.
Please keep this story going. It really deserves more love than it has right now
2959198 Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm actually working on the second part of the story right now so when I start it I can have it updated consistently, which is why I haven't updated CnW. I'm working on just flushing out the last chapter right now and might break it up into two different chapters. But trust me I haven't forgotten about it.
That ending. D'awwwwww
I approve of this fiction.
3007460 Thanks! I thought this was a kind of pleasant chapter.
The feeling, that something will go completely wrong, still won't leave me
At least they enjoy their time now and hopefully in their vacation too
3010664 Nothing could go wrong
How fast can you get the next chapter to me, I need my TaviScratch, I NEED MY TAVISCRATCH
What No CLOP!!!! finally a good story without clop. im not against it but when your like me who shares a laptop with your brother.... When he reads my history.... yea its unplesent, and awkward.. anyhoof really like it and cant wait for the next part. keep it up
You NEED an editer. Your grammer isnt the best and there are parts where i camt even understand what your saying. I cant STAND bad grammer but the story is so good that it drowns that out. Fix the grammer and this will bbe my favorite story!!!!
-Michael A.
Ok the grammer is ALOT better in this chapter but it still could be improved. And again the story is awesome but i have a petpieve for bad grammer... Sorry
Verry nice chapter. Also octavia's cutie mark is a trebble clef not a base
Ok i am deffinatly seeing progress in your writing. Both grammer and content wise. This has to me my favorite vinyl and octavia fanfiction and clost to being my favorite fanfiction period. Keep it up. Also i like the progress with vinyl and her drug problem and im guessing her parents haw somethin to do with the cause of that.
Ok im not going to lie.. I hate rainbow dash. I was hoping that soaryn would cheat on her and they would break up. And i think yoy arn't characterizing rainbow dash corectly acording to the show. Ok that aside this story is great!!! I have my hates but for the most part this is my favorite octavia x vinyl story. All in all best story ever and your grammer and over all writing has improved immensely. Keep it up.
-Michael A.
Note: ....Did I actually comment with this poor grammar? This is so... bad.
Love it Dahling! Was an awesome (much 20% cooler) story
I mean, YOLO, right?