one thing that's weird that I find here
again, this is a clopfic so it doesn't really matter
but
"You have to use smaller words, Twilight, humans aren't very smart."
...?
They don't really have science in the show, and certainly not advanced technology like we have
just bothered me for some reason, I had to say it.
Otherwise, though, it's very good so far, I think

Amazing

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Pony arrogance. They assume they're the smartest around just because any human than comes through is always very confused after trans-dimensional jumping.

(Personally, I'm waiting for a fic that portrays the ponies as still being in the dark ages on anything that isn't magic, having no idea what germs are, and believe in spontaneous generation)

1561500 Um, have you met other humans? I hate to admit it but most of us are dumber than a bucket of shit.

I don't want to be "that guy" but Griffons can get ponies pregnant they'll end up having a Hippogriph. Sorry if this seems like I'm being a jerk/hole for pointing this out, I'm really not trying to be one.

Wow great opening chapter to get me excited for more.

NEXT!

"So, what's it going to be? Yes or no?"

i can think of several hilarious instances of what would happen if he said 'no.'

I don't know how. I don't when. but i sure as hell know i never favd this fic. But I'll read it anyway.

interesting
I am intrigued...

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That's why you make a clop account, I did