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Day 1
10:43AM
In Twilight Sparkles Library she was just reading books as always cleaning and what not until
*BOOM*. The window slams open
Twilight was startled and looked over to and see Rainbow Dash fly though through the window.
"TWILIGHT YOU'VE GOT TO SEE THIS!" yelled Rainbow Dash
"Rainbow What's going on?" Twilight asks
Rainbow just goes over to the TV and turns on the news
This is CH4 with breaking news
"Hi am here in Manehatten there's been an unknown outbreak where dead pony's ponies are coming back and trying to ea-"
Shotgun sound's and sounds of ponies screaming of bloody murder full fills the noise in the background of the news reporter
"As I was saying their eating pony's ponies and turning into them, The princess tells everypony to stay indoors until further notice."
As they about to cut off the reporter was attacked by a zompony, The camera-stallion droped his camera to help to get the
zompony off her until he himself was bitten. and He pulled out a hoofgun and killed it, after that the camera was cut off.
Twilight was in a paniced shock. "T-THIS GOT HAS TO BE A JOKE, RIGHT RAINBOW?!"
"Wish I have it was but no this isn't a joke it's real as it get." Rainbow says in a down tone.
"DOES THE OTHERS KNOW!?"
"Yes Twilight there on their way."
11:56AM
Pinkie, Fluttershy, Rarity, AJ shows up at the library with their saddlebags pack to the grimbrim with what ever they have.
AJ "We need to get to my farm, tell everypony we tellsee to go over there so they don't run out of food or water. for this I don't know
how long this is going to be be but am not going to let any dead head pony to kill our friends and family."
Rarity "well yes who knows how long until those things.. Get to ponyville."
Fluttershy just look down and hide behind AJ
Pinkie yells "YA WHO KNOWS THOSE MEANINGS WELL WHAT THOSE MEANIES WILL DO I MEAN DIDN'T YOU SEE THE NEWS!"
Twilight "I know I know" (she Twilight keeps on continues packing all the books and food she could while and spike was packing medical supplies and a baseball bat as his weapon)
After packing they run out of the library to the farm, as they did they see others are doing the same thing. pony's or ponies boarding up their homes and taking what they can with them.
12:05PM
At the farm almost everypony was there even the all the ponyville doctors and nurses are there with their medical equipment in the barn. There were tents set up outside everywhere, trying to not panic over this.
Than Twilight in her mind something hit her mind suddenly realized something. "AJ, Rarity before walking into AJ homebefore you go inside can I ask you something?"
"Yes?" both of them say at the same time.
"Where's Apple Bloom and Sweetie Bell at?"
AJ and Rarity eye's went gone wind wide open at what they realize that there was going as they realized their sisters went to see the Manehattan high school to see what other schools look like and what they do in the bigger city'scities.
Then they both yelled. "OUR SISTERS ARE IN MANEHATTEN WITH THOSE ZOMPONYS"
Every pony at the farm rememberwith foals realized they did the same sanding their little ones to see the big city, there mom dads and sisters and brothers started to panic.
Until Rainbow yelled "SSSTTTOOOPP!"
Every pony stoped and looked at her
"Look I know there over there but remember that we can call them at the school they gone to see went to so we can see if they're alright ."
Every pony remembers but sadly the farm didn't have a working phone.
Than Rarity takes out her cell phone she flip it open and calls her sisters phone.
12:07PM
Meanwhile at the Manehattan high school
The school was full of teens and young Ponies is trying to stay safe from the zompony attack.
The teen's at the high school looted guns and food shops for supplies, so far the school was made into a fort.
A few were armed but they only had .22 rifles and 12ga shotguns with crossbows, but thanks to the gun shop they looted not too long ago they find lots of rounds to less last them 1/2 yr and keep making sure every shot counts.
Same Some of the teens were builders, their work they were working on the fort walls trying to make them better for to protect them from the oncoming zomponys anyway they can.
But at the rooftop of the 6 story high school.
The Cutie Mark Crusaders were holding each other hoping this will all end and their classmates are doing the same
Then out of nowhere Sweetie Bells cell phone ring and she she picks it up.
"Sweetie are you ok darling. ?" Rarity says panic in her voice.
"Rarity what's going on?!" Sweetie bell says out loud.
"I don't know but are you safe Sweetie bell?"
"Yea the teens at this school knows how to fight and build some kind of wall to hold the zomponys back."
Rarity hears the gun fire. "Do they have guns with them sweetie?!"
"Yes."
"Ok just wanted to know that's all darling."
"Stay there darling am coming for you ok." she says, and hangs up.
Twilight Sparkle asks. "Is everything ok?" "yes the school is built into a makeshift fort but I highly is not doing good don't think they'll be safe for long."
Pinkie pie jump out of nowhere "yea we need to save them!"
"But. Pinkie were not ready to take them on right now, we don't even have fire arm's or a way to take them all back safe."
"Yeah I have gone but I'm on Twilights side here on this onethis time, I mean they took a really big bus there ok. Plus what about the smaller towns that is fulled filled with zomponys by now." Rainbow Dash says.
"So what we are going to do now is set , sit here and do nothing Twilight?!" AJ yelled.
"What no no no no no, we need to get what we need first then go ok AJ."
"Like guns, ammo, food, water, power crystal to power the bus or cars, and medical supplies."
"It be a few days but we can still see how their doing with Raritys cell phone by the way call here to get the old one's to find a 2-way radio."
"Why MissTwilight?" Rarity asks
"Because we don't know when the phone lines go out ok."
"Oh ok darling."
"Fine, but if my little sister die's because we wait I'll never forgive myself."
She then walks away
Twilight "ok girls let's talk to all the pony's here and see if they got what we need to save them, "right" all 5 say"
"Rainbow go talk to AJ ok so we can get what we need to get fast as possible."
"Ok." Rainbow fly to her.
Day 2 6:23AM
The fort of the farm is now well built to hold anything back
By talking to pony's ponies at the farm they say they've seen a bus stop that have a city bus park there and the power crystal still full and can run for way more years to come, but it wasn't built to divert over zomponys yet
"Spike and Fluttershy stay here and make sure if you see any zomponys at the wall kill them all." Twilight say.
"Ok" both of them say at the same time.
"AJ, and Rainbow I want you to go to that bus stop to get our ride here, the ponies here give gave us same some guns and ammo they
bring brought with them"
Here's your weapon AJ.
. 357 revolver 8 shot
50 rounds
Switchblade
Rainbow get a
9mm hoofgun magazines hold 15 rounds
4 magazines
Baseball bat wood
Pinkie and me will go to the gun store to get ammo and guns. Twilight said.say
Pinkie get's a
.22 hunting Semiautomatic magazine holds 10 rounds
10 magazines
Tire Iron
Twilight get's a
12 gauge double-barrel shotgun
30 shells
Metal pipe
6:10AM
At the Manehatten High School
The Cutie Mark Crusaders were up and walking in the big school
After a few mins Apple Bloom asks
"Scootaloo what are we looking for?" " the football locker room or workshop. "
Sweetie Bell asks, "Why?"
"Because after playing so many video games about zombie's we need armor to use so we won't get bitten by them and turn into them."
"Oh ok"
6:43AM
After all that walking they found the work room, "Sweetie Bell hey can you make us some body armor, but make them where you can't bite into them."
"I'll go make some weapon's for us all that we can use. are the nail guns here and melee weapons are over here."
"Apple Bloom make a scooter for me and big but make lightweight but strong."
7:38AM
Geared up and ready to go.
Sweetie bell asks, "Why do we need to help the teens to loot?"
"They take too long of a time to get the same thing that Oley only takes us minutes to do, with us they can get more done"
Apple Bloom says "so where looters now right?" "yes" Scootloo say
"The Cutie Mark Crusaders Looters YAY!"

above you need to remove the crossed out misspelled words and add the ones in red. it took like almost 2 hours to correct all the grammar but I'm finally done! I corrected every grammar mistake I could find

Okay...I'm just gonna stop reading this here. I want to cry at the monstrosity of punctuation and usage errors....