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Fair play, I can see how that might get confusing. My reasoning for writing her perspective that way is that since Twilight is one of two protagonists, we should see through her eyes half of the time, much like how a more traditional novel might handle a case of multiple viewpoints. I definitely get where you're coming from, though - no hooves or horn to speak of for me, either.
Thanks for the feedback! It's greatly appreciated

KEEP THIS UP, PLEASE. This is very fun to read, hopefully it has been fun to write as well!

There were some >greentext stuff that you've forgotten to take out tho, in the past chapters, but that's fine since the quality on everything else is pretty good.

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ah nuts. thanks for pointing that out, i'll give it another passthrough when i get off of work!
And I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Don't worry - it's been incredibly fun to write

Certainly an interesting start

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Little idea maybe add when the PoV changes this:

Twilight PoV
Anon PoV

So it might be less confusing :D
Btw. Good story so far (currently at chapter 10)

Great chapters so far , can't wait to find out what ambrosia and the mecca is all about. Imo it'd be pretty cool to have pal and hearth join him and have adventures as he progresses back towards equestria kinda like the fimfic bad Mondays where it had a similarly interesting concept about half in.

Finally caught up, can’t wait for more! Also I like Ambrosia.

Okay I'm very interested in the story of the Undead Minotaur; the escape scene was very nicely written, quite fun to read, delicious even.