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Although each chapter has its major focus, I also enjoy the little vignettes you add to the main story, showing life in this sex obsessed Ponyville. The Tuesday tradition and Derpy’s horny cameo were especially fun additions to this chapter!

This story is such smutty porny nonsense, and you strike a such an appealing and refreshing balance to it. There's an unpredictable, indulgent kayfabe to it — I can see why that might be offputting to some readers, who want a smoother sense of immersion or aren't comfortable with the themes — but the implicit, unquestioned and hammered in presentation of all mares (and fillies) as lust-obsessed, naive, and approval-seeking; and of stallions as confidently but not quite cruelly exploitative of that is really hot.

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Strong agreement with this — one of the things I like about your writing is bouncing around a lot, and taking different scenes to complement each other. I kind of think the first half of the chapter is the hotter part — not to undersell the fun recognition Rarity gets as slut, or anything — but the unpredictability of how far you'll dive into a side story, and the talent at detailing just the hottest bits, (because presumably that's what motivates you): it creates an extremely enjoyable effect.

Thanks for writing, hope to find out what's next!

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That "Tuesday" event was a completely random idea I had, as was Derpy's silly (but sexy!) adventure, and was really fun to write! I simply love throwing unexpected curves at my readers to keep them both guessing and (hopefully!) entertained!

Thanks for reading and commenting!

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Thanks for reading, and thank YOU for teaching me a new word: Kayfabe! I never heard that word before, and even after looking it up I had to ponder the meaning for a bit, but I can see how it applies to this story.

As an organic writer, I don't follow a set storyline, which frees me to add instances and sequences that are really fun and sexy, to keep my readers guessing. True, it doesn't always work out as I'd hoped (see my experiment in Estrus among Us and the HUGE amount of flak I received for that one!), but on the whole, my additions are welcomed. A lot of my jokes fly over most readers' heads, as I think I'm dealing with a younger audience, which is somewhat disappointing, but a few of them land, even when I don't realize how funny they are.

The next chapter will deal with my new favorite pony to lewd, our favorite Purple Smart, and alll the devious, sensual, immoral, slutty, unspeakable things that will be done to her!!

MUHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!

Next chapter, please!

Dayumm, that was graphic! Me likes

Fuck! That was hot!! Keep up the good work!