"Bang!"

Damn... she’s going to end up taking on the whole family, isn’t she? Go, AJ, go!

I love your realistic scifi style setups, they just make the porn parts feel pornier.

I stumbled across this "Control" story thing you got going & passed if off as some one shot porn thing

However I read through it & the characters (porn aside) is actually very interesting. It hooked me for the story tbh

Simon sighed again, then went down the hall to the pony's room and stopped. His hand strayed to the doorknob, then he shook his head, spun on his heel, and went upstairs to take a cold shower.

Simon came off as someone I could've genuinely hated from the first story for how bluntly disrespectful he was being but here is where I think we see the human in that old man. He might've thought of the boy's mom in this moment & felt like he was disrespecting her memory & thus walked away when the temptation was basically after him. He stuck to his morals I guess. I respect that & I can accept that.

Honestly, Simon & AJ, would be adorable to see. I saw a genuine romantic couple thing growing from their slight interactions. Especially they way Simon started treating her more gentle like.

Bruh this is supposed to be some random ass porn fic I found, why am I so invested in the plot?! 🥴

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Simon being a complete dick to both Fluttershy and AJ was quite intentional, as I'm heartily sick of reading stories on this site where Humans are automatically batshit crazy over ponies from the moment they lay eyes on them. In my view, our actual reactions to talking, sapient equines would be far, FAR different given our history of meeting other races, let alone if we were to meet extraterrestrials.

In all of my stories, even the ones that are 90% fap material, I always try to inject some actual conflict and dialogue. Sometimes I favor the slow burn, and sometimes I jump right into the "action." Still, I usually want to have something else interesting going on in the background that's simmering, some nuance that not every reader always catches. For example, as you can see from this chapter, the youngest son is playing a game with his family to try and keep the mare for himself. He knows his older brother already had a tryst with Fluttershy (but he's NOT aware she came back once more). so he's conniving to keep his Dad out of the running as well.

BUT...he doesn't know about Applejack's stubborn nature...nor the fact she usually gets whatever she wants...

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A realistic take of a meeting between two completely different species. I like this approach. Dope set up.

Also, question

Marcus is the oldest that got with Fluttershy
Jackson is the youngest that got with AJ

Correct?

Also damn, I didn't have Jackson plotting this whole time on AJ in my mind AT ALL. Genuinely thought Marcus was gonna be the absolute houndog of this story considering how quick he was eager to ablige AJ after her little walk off. Nevermind him having just had a interesting meet up with Fluttershy. TWICE no less!

2 down, 1 to go.

Jackson was slick with that bait. He knew exactly what he was doing with that "rant" of his. Took one look at her the minute she showed up & knew she HAD to be his & no one else's. 🤣

Seriously thought Simon was gonna break by the end of it after that show AJ put on for the three of them, which given her own admission, was most definitely 100% more for the elder of the three.

She was no doubt expecting Simon the most out of the three to come knocking at the door rather Jackson. She was almost correct until he changed his mind last minute.

I'm sure Simon will break, eventually.

BUT...he doesn't know about Applejack's stubborn nature...nor the fact she usually gets whatever she wants...

Oooh, Simon & AJ definitely gonna get some "alone time" if this is implying what I'm thinking it is. 😅 Their personalities are gonna make for an interesting scene no doubt. Jackson is playing with fire.

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Jackson has been playing the long con ever since he first laid eyes on Fluttershy. He was genuinely repulsed by the thought of the aliens when he first heard about them, but seeing his first one up close quickly changed his mind! And yes, he's the younger of the two brothers.

I've given some brief insights into this family dynamic, and I'll delve slightly more into the specific feelings the brothers have toward each other, but only so far as the story takes it. Ultimately, readers don't tune in for Earth family drama, they want to see unspeakable things being done to willing mares! And O man, do I plan to deliver!

Look for a few surprise guests as well as some plot (pun CLEARLY intended) twists, for, in the words of The Lord of Chaos:

Huh. Now that surprised us. Well done.