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Thanks for the chapter!
Your question left me in a complicated situation, all three have characteristics and reasons to be with Zitrus, so when in doubt, choose option D) Choose the three.😁
Hmm, overall its a nice chapter. How do I know it? Because while I'm not a writer I was an analyst, I know why story is good and why story is bad.
Anyway, I recommend that in the next or future chapter you explain things more of why does he thinks that he need to choose one of the three alicorn as mates/lover instead of all three.
I mean, explain the reason behind it. Preferably with experience, past memories, or at the very least, thought of what is love and how it's supposed to be.
From here, depend on your choice of explaining the reason behind it, you can either take things slowly-Make the characters interact with each other whether it's personal or not then it will slowly grow into love and not just physical attractions- or you can play fast with confession of love then go and make one or two clopfics-like chapter with short timeskip between each of the chapter.
Or you can choose to play moderate, you can make the characters interact and knowing each other more in a more personal level like more past memories or revelation of past action, then add a clop scene or chapter in between a heartwarming event/moment.
Either way and choose, if you keep this up you may gain more views and like in the future date, though... you need to know that different choosing may result in different type of readers reading your your story.
If you choose the slow way, the readers may be those who are interested in romance story, if you choose the fast way then the reader may be those who are interested in clop, if you choose the moderate way you can try to keep both type of story reader enganged with your story.
I personally prefer the latter rather than the former or the second. Anyway, goodluck in your future chapter.
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Haha lol.
There might also be option E: Choose none
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Wow, thank you a lot for this review.
Alright, about the first (and without giving any mayor spoilers) I can say that after 29 current chapters it is clear that this story is not a clop only. BUT I also once said that I like to have some kind of speed in the story.
The other part is, yes, we will get an explaining, why Zitrus didn’t ask all three of them out. Just like I try to explain everything in the story. But I do not always explain everything just at the moment of happening. Sometimes it gets explained later with little hints you find during the story.
For example in chapter 26 (Marked as spoiler in case you haven’t read chapter 26 so far) Savage asks Blueberry and Crystal if they have slept with Zitrus. That she asks because of her guilty feeling that she actually had sex with him but unlike her, her sisters didn’t. This will then reveal two chapters later.
Not all of them are hints you actually get right on the beginning and not all are for mayor events. That is actually interesting IF you read the story for a second time. You might find scenes, with you on the first read “skipped”, are a foreshadowing for later scenes.
So, what I try to say is: Zitrus reason will be explained. Just like everything else sooner or later will. Most likely later. (I mean, does someone know the secret behind Crystal’s blue/purple cut off stain that got first mentioned in chapter 18? :P )