Screw that caribou. I hope the Royal Sisters sent him to the sun to get burned.

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Well he didn't get sent to the Sun but he is practically a vegetable after Luna got done with him, but don't worry a caribou is going to get sent to the Sun and thank you for commenting on my story

You're welcome. Maybe he get turned into a cooked vegetable after being sent to the sun?

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🤔 Well they are a lot of caribou corpses around, so I guess they could just burn them

looks good, i aqlways enjoy a good story of the caribou losing. you should add a bit to the emotions, like emotions or body language

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Thanks for the tip but what do you think about the fight scene was it a bit too short

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i cant complain, looked good to me but if i you need any other advise, i can try to help

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That's all I ask thank you

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okay then. eager to see the royal guards in action with the princesses

Well, this is a better take compared to the many rape porn storytelling of Fall of Equestria. Although you need an editor badly though. Over half the writing is almost unreadable and a lot of the grammar is all over the place.

Interesting take, but you need to spend some quality time fixing the writing, spelling errors, words capitalized for no reason, wrong words in places. It's as if some sort of speech to text was used with zero folllow-up.

Otherwise use a decent start.

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Thanks for the advice and they will be a corrected version

friend, friend! I'm telling you now, you and I are going to get along very well.
I loved your soundtrack and the battle was good, you just need more gore for the cabiru to suffer, let the idiots burn slowly while we enjoy the view with some popcorn.

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You know when I had the idea to write about the Caribou genocide I had no idea on how many friends I would make but I'm glad to have as one

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And don't worry they will all burn in the next chapter

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🤝
(gives him a sinister look as he shakes his hand and the other returns it, both smile)

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🤝

This looks like you put it together with a Speech to Text device and didn't look over it before hitting publish.

I highly recommend combing over this and fixing the typos.

Beyond that, glorious start. Reminds me of one of my MLP40K fics. I used the caribou as redshirt civilization when the planet was being besieged by the Drukhari. It was fun.

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Thanks for the advice and the praise