First problem is that there NEEDS to be SPACES.

The teen gave out a sob and dropped to her knees sobbing into her hands.

Poor sunset shimmer

Hopefully one of the staff members or some adult will find out where she’s been living and get her a better home to live in.

Also.. Fuck you Gilda! Fuck you and your crew. Hopefully they will get arrested in the future.

Also anyone else want to join me breaking their kneecaps for raping sunset shimmer

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Yes I agree

FOR CELESTIA SAKE!!! WHAT DID THEY DO TO HER!!!
this story is more dark than I thought

Seeing a lot of potential so far so I'm giving it an upvote, though I'm going to recommend you put a Non-Con tag on it for what happens in Chapter 2

For now, all I can see is keep up the good work, and consider getting a pre-reader. You're doing fine so far.

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Thanks so much for your advice! I made sure to add the tag and I will definitely be adding proof reading to my list before adding new chapters. I appreciate your support! ^-^

I don't normally go for Anon-A-Miss fics..but this caught my eye.

I really really want to like this but the spacing is making it really hard to read as my eyes just kinda glazed over while i was reading. still gonna continue reading for a bit more in the hope the spacing improves.