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The sonic movie 2 replacement scene of Knuckles vs Sonic 1st round felt a little forced. I get you are doing your own take of it, but you should try and make future recreation scenes actually flow better. For a second I thought I was reading a different story and after thought it was a weird extended gag and even at one point that it wasn't real.
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I see your point and what you're saying makes sense. But at the end of the day, it is just fantasy. It isn't exactly like like that scene in Sonic the Hedgehog 2. There are a lot of similarities, but it is not blue lightning vs. red lightning. It is more or less rainbow trail vs. red lightning. It's just sometimes a bit hard to convey that in word format. There are many secrets on that island and this story includes references to a bunch of different movies that I grow fond of. The whole purpose of this scene is just to show that Caleb or Knuckles as his nickname is more dominant over Rainbow Dash as you could probably figure out.
I understand how it can seem confusing for Caleb to be that strong, but he has supernatural abilities and that includes increased strength. He was just born with that. It's something he got from his grandparents. I would explain that to you right now, but I'll let the story do that later on. Also, sometimes it's hard to get creative and make things flow nicely, so I have to improvise sometimes. But I will try to improve on future chapters. Thanks for the commentary.
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I was mainly referring to the dialogue being similar in ways where it makes no sense. Why would Rainbow tell him he can't have her power. In the original it makes sense since Robotnik was working with Knuckles, but here it makes zero sense, just as the one shining example. Like I said if you are doing your own take it should make logical sense in story.
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Alright. Let me explain. Yes, it does not make sense here in this context. I agree with you 100 percent. I probably need to rewrite it slightly so it makes more sense. As we've seen before, the Mane Six were able to unlock Rainbow power in the Season 4 finale to defeat Tirek. Before that, it was just their natural abilities. Since we know that Rainbow can fly really fast, that is her "power" if you want to call it that. We've all seen those fanfics of Rainbow and Sonic trying to figure out who is faster, so I just replaced the characters around.
As for Rainbow saying why she would refuse to let Knuckles to take her power, it's because she had no idea who this creature was and what his abilities were. For all she knew, he could have the power of Tirek, which he doesn't, but she doesn't know that. So, she'd assume that he would try to steal it from her and use it for himself, but he has own power, so he doesn't need to use that. I hope that makes sense. I think I'll go back and revise it slightly so it makes more sense. I can see how this creates problems and if I fix it around a little bit, I think we shouldn't have any more problems.
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No, not really. It just feels forced to me that you had her said that just to match the scene from the movie more and this just feels like backpedaling to justify it. I doubt you will convince me so if you feel strongly that it makes sense to you since you have the bigger picture in mind, then go ahead and leave it in.
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Alright, tell you what. How about you tell me what could be improved upon in this chapter and I'll go back and add them in? You give me suggestions and I'll put them in there. I know that it seems like none of this makes sense, but I'm seriously trying my best to make this a good story. I guess I must have seriously stretched the term inspiration a little too much.
Something worth mentioning though is that not everything is going to line up at the beginning but by the time you reach the end, all the loose ends should have been tied up. So, if you seriously believe that I could improve on it, I'm willing to do that. I'm not trying to be stubborn or arrogant in any way. So, if you have suggestions, please let me know. I'll be glad to use them. I am always willing to use suggestions given to me at any point. So, if you have any, don't hesitate to ask.
Woah they got serve
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Yeah, they did. Something worth mentioning is that Caleb had watched Sonic the Hedgehog 2 already and the first fight scene between Sonic and Knuckles, he had really enjoyed. So, he wanted to reenact it. That's why the shadow was there. One of his tactics against opponents is to reenact cool battle scenes from movies he has watched in order to display dominance over his enemies. It might seem a little strange, but the tactic is cool nonetheless.
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Things definitely got a little heated in this latest chapter, but that's part of being a human with supernatural abilities granted from birth. There will definitely be more scenes like this in the future where things get very heated, especially when more of Caleb's past gets uncovered and revealed to the Mane Six.